»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #35
»
Late My Eyes Opened 1:6
| Open Poetry #35 |
|
Late My Eyes Opened 1:6 |
|
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Wrapped as she was in the wrinkled folds Of sheets pulled from tucks of sky once neat with straight lines smoothed to please the eyes of those who glanced toward the blue or lay in some repose of dream she did not know I saw the way she swelled below the throat of white into a softness that pleaded to be desired or that the curve of legs she sometimes stood upon was a hint of reveal at the edges of ruffled grey I slept late the day For she hid the suns rise and haunted too The sound of dreams spent searching For the touch of you so pulled round my own naked form The scent of wet bark and bleeding grass Remembering the times when I might have risen And walked along familiar paths Letting the soak of her wash away my own grey When she poured herself again upon the earth I found my own thirst to drink of her grow Then woke to late gloom and strode bare across the room To press my nose against clear panes Runneled by the offerings of her form To become semi opaque eyes I could not blink Now focused to define an outline I might trace Gently on my soul As this in storm I stood Wanting the hands of you to trace along my spine Letters that told of us and begged of time A few more beats of heart A modicum of respite at best I felt you move through wide-eyed dreams And knew someplace too you stood And thought of rain |
||
| © Copyright 2005 Cpat Hair - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
What great images! I love this one. I could see it all, and have seen it all. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
||
|
babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
...and the man delivers... hell yes.... **loving this series, Chief** **babyblu **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
||
|
D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Powerful verse that elevates every time read it. |
||
Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
An incredible poem Ron. (I read the lot) and enjoyed the entire series and forgot to mention that!  Looking for more. |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
.jpg) This late in the day, brings the sheets back to cover limbs, and dreams... but still the grey is there, and the rain pending... somewhere close, this touches, whether it be you, or me... I remember. ~*~ Have I thanked you lately for casting inspiration?  |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful... Hugs~N. |
||
|
Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Where is 1:3,1:4, and 1:5? enjoying the beauty ~tier  |
||
|
Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
appreciating very much you and your talents sir.... and quietly whispering brava...... I really want to care, |
||
|
LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Wanting the hands of you to trace along my spine Letters that told of us and begged of time A few more beats of heart A modicum of respite at best I felt you move through wide-eyed dreams And knew someplace too you stood And thought of rain Beauty doesn't seem to serve this work of art justice...I have no words for the incredibility of this write...but I am going back to read again...this takes the reader in, and tells an entire movie...bittersweet, painful, yet, most understanding...exceptionally well done! |
||
timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
this is just a wonderful continuation and I am waiting for more.... |
||
|
Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Beautiful!! |
||
|
Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
And as she looked out on the rain were her thoughts shared and filled with memory...The vision you paint is powerful and alive...*hugs* |
||
|
A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Rain..rain....(Performing my indian rain dance) After reading your poems...I wish for rain.......without my umbrella!  ~ARH  "Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take - but by the moments that take our breath away." |
||
|
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Wanting the hands of you to trace along my spine Letters that told of us and begged of time A few more beats of heart A modicum of respite at best I felt you move through wide-eyed dreams And knew someplace too you stood And thought of rain" and this is how I want ALL men to think of me...alright, maybe not all, but dang, I can dream right? Lovely words. You make the girls swoon and they pretend that your words are for them. It's a gift.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
||
|
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
As this in storm I stood Wanting the hands of you to trace along my spine Letters that told of us and begged of time A few more beats of heart A modicum of respite at best I felt you move through wide-eyed dreams And knew someplace too you stood And thought of rain Oh... this... is... breathtaking. *S* And it's going into my library... to capture my heart again and again. *S* |
||
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I felt you move through wide-eyed dreams And knew someplace too you stood And thought of rain I keep a fragrance bottle my |
||
|
Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like the way you use imagery in your poems. Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
||
|
LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I had to come back for another read, maybe it's just my mood today, but this brought tears to my heart...I wish, all of us, including me, would remember others life this, firstly instead of being so self imposed at times...we tend to take for granted what is most important to us, and...what means the most...those little smiles of gratitude are great big circus posters....hugs |
||
|
timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
 |
||
|
littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
How in God's name do you do this? she did not know I saw the way she swelled below the throat of white into a softness that pleaded to be desired |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
