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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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birds will shelter there rocks saplings line the road that runs this knoll down there someone farms the valley god farms here or else merely watches it slip this side nothing but sand boulders trees all sand on the glass curve grain by grain going down here it is look mountains over there behind me sea something like a stream between business end of this one hourglass some day those peaks will make an island birds will shelter there going to the coast [This message has been edited by Ratleader (06-06-2005 12:35 AM).] |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
and behold a new home is formed....wonderful images are found with in this.....I like the style too! I keep a fragrance bottle my |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
and they will roll up their pantlegs and scurry along hoping to outrun the new tide not even noticing the birds |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I see it, through you |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
they find a home in your words |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed "those peaks will make an island birds will shelter there going to the coast" So much of life depends on adaptability. This is well done!  |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
beautiful use of form to enhance the message. The flow is evident, the devices effective. Wonderful piece of work. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your pen is a veritable paint brush!  Linda |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
How like life, to need the careful calibration of a sand clock, an instrument fine tuned and balanced.... yet able to contain dreams of art and breathing life with just a touch of imagination. Ah, I read too much into this, methinks, but enjoyed it well. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RatMan~ Your word-pictures are worthy of framing~ This is W O N D E R F U L ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
this style fits you well Ed, and the visuals in this are lovely. Well done. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've known for a long while that you have an unequaled gift for capturing a moment... but you literally paint a scene between the fall of one grain of sand and the next... then give us hope for what might be... There is nothing simple about this except it's simply superb!!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
When all the superlatives have been used, please accept my..well done Sir. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed, I do believe you have been possessed by Whitman. *grin* |
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