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a poem in the stiff of it
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a poem in the stiff of it |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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tonight was stories bled by dread hesitation circumstance all the things I'd never said pausing eyes in the past tense focused on the hemingway the minimal of she is dead and never shall she flower speech or spritz Chanel upon the death staining this four hundred march sheets that shroud the loneliness hovering the lifelessness of her vacant eyes and it's a poem in the stiff of it as her hands were grasping cloud-- curled in some miscue of grip as the candies danced around confetti on the bed she wished coded in some placement splayed photographed in infrared-- morning told the stories bled by the jets of red across jagged in a new day's lie bleaching bright forgiveness yellowing intensity and weakly smiling smile tonight was stories told too much intense as all the cuts that filled the cup were things I might have said instead a poem in the stiff of it of her muscles by the jets break a finger point it dead in accusatory stance - as the candles danced I bled as the mandorla was half begging for the noon of this jagged in a new line day stories told too much of it-- tonight was legend hand me dream laughing roller coaster screams ringing in the day...as we pound the drum and chant the sun wishing whispering the love a poem in the stiff of it and fingers' tangling the webs marking the bad "x". |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
just  ...Love you, Karen... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...tonight was legend hand me dream ...a poem in the stiff of it... ~*~ Hugging you through the thick of it... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Karen, when the going gets tough, the tough and true poets get 'poeting'. You my dear, are proof of that! Sending you a loving, healing and compassionate hug, Linda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Amazing lines, dear Karen! The reader rides your waves of emotion along with you. Love, Margherita  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Emotional,and sad. Thinking of you and wishing you better days, martyjo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks all for the enouraging replies as I'm still trying to find my voice here. yer all so lovely thank you |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I think your voice is just fine Karen, you do an amazing job finding it....  I keep a fragrance bottle my muse gave me when I met him in endless winter and he settled me into remembering who I am. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
tonight was stories told too much intense as all the cuts that filled the cup were things I might have said instead a poem in the stiff of it It is good that you find your voice to feel the moments like these. I feel such pain in this, but words are for sure oinment on the cut. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity, words you weave leaving me speechless. Doc |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
You are a mistress of verse. This was just..incredible! |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity...Captivating weave of words in this web you have spun. The mind is so unpredictable at times and we know not what stories it weaves for us to interpret...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is going to sound strange, as if normal things come out of my mouth . . . But there is more to this . . . This was foreplay Karen. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"..in the stiff of it" the core is the hardest to get to..  be good to you and the rest will come.love you lady. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Without attempting to explain anything, I'll just say "thanks". smiles to Susie? I've got my fingers crossed that all of life is "foreplay".  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
intense karen... and painted well on the soot of another black night and dreams.. some dreams are just mroe real than others... hugs mfriend |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
your imagery in this piece is intense...glad I dropped by home today  Ruth |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahaha good point - let's hope that is truth. Or else I am tossin' in the towel . . . |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
oh Karen what a delicious thought!!!  I love foreplay!! So the rest will be fantastic!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Deep pause here and holding my breath for the next installment. Everyone above has said it all so much better than I can say it. But...I do have to agree that I hope it is foreplay, too! You know how I think anyway. The one thing I will add is, I feel a quiet sort of courage in this black night poem that lives. Now....I've probably gone and said too much....oops, just my way, forgive. *hugs* the jojo lily |
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