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WranglrButts9
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since 2004-10-24

Posts 108
Iowa, US

0 posted 2005-05-19 12:59 PM

Prairie grass blowing in the wind
Sunset setting in the western sky
Light breeze blowing through my hair
My head bobbing in a rhythm

My ears can hear
The plod of hooves
And the distant laughter
Of all the neighbor kids

The back of my legs are hot
They’re starting to get wet
My legs swinging back & forth
With the movement beneath me

I soon see the whip of a tail
And the bounce of a mane
Flying past us,
Determined to stay caught up

Laughing softly
While in a slow trot
Ponytail bouncing,
And hands held firm

Up a hill we go
Pushing with all our might
Get to the top & stop
Just to stare into the sky

Everything is so beautiful
While up on your back
I feel as if I could conquer the world
As long as you’re here with me!

Tell me what you think =D

Bailey

Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2005-05-19 08:59 AM

Bailey,
I think you have painted a wonderful picture here, and took me along for the ride!

much enjoyed!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2005-05-19 09:01 AM

I think this was very well written..
full of excellent imagery.
Very much enjoyed the read.
Hugs~Nancy

Life is one great big canvas;
throw all the paint on it you can.
-Danny Kaye

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2005-05-19 09:01 AM

Nice imagery Bailey, and it is good to see you posting in open too. Well done.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2005-05-19 09:07 AM

suggested title...."Long Rider"

I was right there with ya...had two horses, once...and loved to ride bareback...could even jog bareback, and to open up in a gallop, theres no free er feeling...those powerful muscles beneath you, almost feeling and knowing his every move...

Greatly enjoyed this, thanks so much for the read

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2005-05-19 09:58 AM

smiling wide, watching you ride to the top
a fine galloping write, Bailey
and I'm giving you an A+

"the bounce of a mane" could be your title

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

6 posted 2005-05-19 10:08 AM

good one
enjoyed

"The Ride"
for my input

bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

WranglrButts9
Member

since 2004-10-24

Posts 108
Iowa, US

7 posted 2005-05-19 01:40 PM

Thanks for the replies everyone! To write something not so depressing or confusing was so nice, wish I could do more of this. lol

I'm also happy I could bring back memories for everyone that has/continues to ride! The feeling is indescribable (dont think I spelled that right). I have been riding my whole life and have yet to see a day I did not enjoy it.

Bailey
p.s. glad you liked it midnitesun =P.. ill work on that senryu (thats the name isnt it??) later

Good judgment comes from experience,
and a lotta that comes from bad judgment.

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