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Beautiful Failure
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Beautiful Failure |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Colors from glass will shatter the dawn upon which my words will fall in pieces of lonely as intricate patterns lay still in your gloved palm &the seduction of darkness will whisper to my silence -- to winter’s ghost I am made of ash this is my voice I stumble, but never see my fall these, my days, of time and space brush dust between us faith you said will fall beautiful failure from these lips that I can no longer embrace each echo inside or touch again this ache, long dead wanting: the palmed prayer only silence can hear ~~*~~ I'm Standing on a bridge I'm waitin in the dark I thought that you'd be here by now Theres nothing but the rain ~~**~~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
your poetry has a touch of sadness along with its beauty it always draws me in |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I am made of ash this is my voice ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ You already know L~   |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sad, thoughtful inspire.. A beautiful success. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
well, I beg to differ, as your writings are filled with potential and written masterfully but, yes girl, your coming in loud and clear been there, felt that exceptionally good writing.... |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Such a range of emotion… Enjoyed. JL  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Well done Lauren, chock full of feelings, and a joy to read. Thanx |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautifully penned straight from your heart. Hugs pretty lady~ In the midst of winter, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you for this, Lauren! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Colors from glass will shatter the dawn upon which my words will fall in ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I am made of ash this is my voice ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ these, my days, of time and space brush the dust between us faith you said will fall beautiful failure from these lips that I can no longer embrace each echo inside or touch again this ache, long dead wanting: the palmed prayer only silence can hear ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ so many lines in this just take me in... was hard to not highlight the whole write.. I can no longer embrace each echo inside or touch again this ache *sigh* (yktiktykik) I am made of ash this is my voice and what an amazing voice it is dear poetess. Im always grateful to get to read your writings.  one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord, you have described exactly how I feel: I am made of ash this is my voice I stumble, but never see my fall This is just stunning, Lauren. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You write the pain like none other, and you Lady Lauren, are all the more beautiful. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
just needed to breath this one in again L~ damn... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
whoa...this is magnificent! oh my gosh...I have no words...just so blown away by this...  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Well....look what I found! I'm able to participate more fully again, and today I'm looking for jewels I've missed....like this one. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren....Your voice is made of many things beautiful...but I don't see failure! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I am made of ash this is my voice''' hugssss and love to alll thank you.... ~~**~~ I don’t mind spending everyday |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Elegant and drop dead gorgeous as always, Greeneyes...I am in awe. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
So good to read you again. And failure? Is mostly a matter of degree, or perception. |
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