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Dawn - a Villanelle
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Dawn - a Villanelle |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Fresh dew that sparkles on the lawn With rainbow's irridescent hue Brings thoughts of you in early dawn. Such memories to dwell upon Are brought alive with morning's new Fresh dew that sparkles on the lawn. The gentle sound of bird and fawn As nature greets the world anew Brings thoughts of you in early dawn. Perhaps the mists of Avalon Are touched by God to make this brew Fresh dew that sparkles on the lawn. Your beauty was surpassed by none And it is right that morning dew Brings thoughts of you in early dawn. Though years have passed since you are gone As is the life that we once knew Fresh dew that sparkles on the lawn Brings thoughts of you in early dawn. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh dear...deer...  wow |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is just beautiful, Balladeer! I always enjoy reading your poetry. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Your poetry is as beautiful and brilliant as ever! ~ARH  We attract hearts by the qualities we display, we retain them by the qualities we possess.~Jean Baptiste Antoine Suard |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Ever the romantic. I love it,marty |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
There seems to be no limit to your talent. Beautifully done, Michael! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No limits, indeed. This is beautiful, Sir. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh my....how lovely. hugs, Chris You said you'd give me light- |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this paints a valentine perfectly... Enjoyed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so very lovely. *S* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Michael, these words glide through the mind in such a fluid motion, I am truly reminded of a waltz.  This is absolutely wonderful ... the rhyme, the cadence ... oh my. You sure know how to make this gal's day. What a beautiful piece my 'Deer!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
MM....you always amaze me. Deb |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My oh my! Now I know what you've been up to! You were laboring over writing the perfect villanelle! ~ and a very lovely and moving one it be!  So good to be reading your poetry again. You certainly are a versatile writer and I enjoy this poem very much. Hugs with love, Linda |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
I very much enjoyed this. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
A wonderfully written villanelle, Michael. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My thanks to you all! I have always enjoyed villanelles for the rhyme scheme and the difficulty of making them interesting with so many repeating lines. Thank you for enjoying it  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Hey 'Deer, can I give ya a hearty ho ho and pass the rum....gosh, but you have definitely done a whale of a job on this one. Well done, sir... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
One of the most beautiful villanelles I have ever read. Thank you Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
simply perfect...but I've come to expect nothing less from you oh master of poetry |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
beautiful, and even more so the form... good to read you my friend |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Oh boy oh boy, would I be a happy Dutchie if someone would ever write a poem like that for me. You certainly have a romantic heart Deer and you're right, the Villanelle is such a beautiful form to write in. Thank you for sharing your gift with us. TitiaLike scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Absolutely wonderful! JL |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I enjoyed reading this a second time. Very lovely indeed. Nan and I had a great time together and with LeeJ. I hope more poets can join us nect time Take care Liz |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What better way to write anew than to use a great theme into a great format... You're the bestest, Balladeer.. I like the unexpected twist at the end too - Got any more good stuff hiding up that sleeve?  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
'Tis nigh a masterpiece, methinks Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wow! It's like old friend's week here! Makes me realize how much I've missed you all by not being around very much. That I'll have to change...thanks again. Even the 'loper! Good to see you, old friend  |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Awwww... loved it! I almost forgot how much I love this form. This Villanelle is just great and such a pleasure to read. Thankee. |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
This is exceptionally good. Not you common "toe" "political" or "other".  very poetic and soft and poetically soft. love this one. |
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