Open Poetry #35 |
Femme Fatal |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rewrite Femme Fatal She struck me a Medusa’s cast Thrown in a blast of icy stare That froze me like an icicle Upside down in the winter’s air I could not turn or run or doge I simply stood as frozen prey Kept immobile by her eyes That would not let me melt away She’s froze the tailings of my heart Tattooed her image on my eye Wicked in its consequence It’s a hell of a way to die And now my essence stands condemned Compressed an icy form of wait Unable to utter warning cries To future souls drawn to her bait Living solid in frosty bite Left with only dreams at night |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I don't know why, but while reading this, could vision that crazy movie with the Snow Queen, ohhh, I forget the movie, but...this certainly packs a wallop...hugs dear poet friend |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
well done m'friend... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Good morning Sy! Sorry...I'm running late.. Much enjoyed this morning's read. ~Morning hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Awesome! Eric |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
A hell of a way to die indeed! A wonderfull work. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ, Thanks for the read. Gentle, Thank you my friend. Nancy, Thank you dear. Ericc Sounds good to me. adagio Enjoyed your comment. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
enjoyed this read this afternoon Sy |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Unable to utter warning cries To future souls drawn to her bait Even if you could ... no one would listen anyway, the femme fatale is that powerful. mmmm ...I see a multitude of melting icicles ... Just marvelleous, dear Seymour. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing, Glad you enjoyed. Margherita LOL enjoyed your comment. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow! interesting m'friend~ My spirit will rise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MGROVES Thank you for the WOW. |
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