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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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emme, the first words were yours awkward and puerile but true an opened door a window smashed i knew it then oh shackled star oh hungry mouth ten suns between us now this is not longing but i remember and emme, i'm sorry |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You point it out "it is not longing, but I remember" and you remember so beautifully in these words, dear Raffaele! emme come ... (come in italiano!) Abbracci Margherita  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Raph.....I don't understand the word "emme". I looked it up and got a river in Switzerland and a model with that name. Can you enlighten me? I like the feel of the poem, except for not understanding the most important word. Thanks!  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
raffi, my exmaster called me M thanks for the reminder and hey,u look like you've been pumping some iron.....not bad  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oh shackled star oh hungry mouth ten suns between us now this is not longing but i remember Oh Jesus Bello....you've collapsed me "oh shackled star oh hungry mouth" WOW! Mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" Michael Hutchence (INXS) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
heartfelt words ( and sometimes the meaning is only meant for one...)love the "emme" M |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Raph? E me please, asap. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! Just WOW! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Wow...Not many words can describe this poem except wow. I'm the wrost critiquer...I've come to realize that. I can't say anything bad about this work. I thought it was brilliant. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"ten suns between us now this is not longing but i remember" good grief Raph...I don't know the story behind this, but the emotions here, make me want to reach out and give you great big hugs... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Ah, those single beat moments of clarity! Nicely done, Sir. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks for the kind words everyone martie, 'emme' simply sounds out the letter m(the first in the subject's name). though i titled this m, i felt simply using the letter within the poem lacked intimacy. emme was a natural fit, seeming like a name itself |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Raph, I love this...you always have these awesome titles..so well thought out and unique... Why can I NOT TELL JOKES???? l*ve you. heee *blush* |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
a gentle offering Raph, beautiful you bleed through this |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Excellent outpouring Raph, ya done good with this. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Ralph, this was like reading a movie...with the visuals right there within...great emotional write, all good emotions...wonderfully done |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I will never again whine about you not posting anything... when you do it's worth a million postings.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks for the explanation Raph...I had finally figured it out myself I can see why you used the sound in letters instead of M. So very good! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the write, and the new pic |
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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
Ya, I am feeling it too! Hi, long time no see. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
And another thing Martie...Aenimal has finally memorized the alphabet and learned the tune to twinkle twinkle little star...and he has a fine poem like this one about every letter too.....there's not a name of any gal that hasn't dropped his dead butt at some time or another....from A to Z....!!!.(You can see his current honey on his back (as usual) in his photo)..I will have to admit though, he's done quite a job on this one.... |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I just love it when you write! And it's 4:30 AM so I can't say much for fear of saying something too terribly weird, but I did want to reply. not sure anyone could refuse an apology like this. You're brilliant, that's what I think. Yep... You are. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
awww Raph . . . I have missed your words so very much and you know damn well that this is a beautiful gift to the one you write such sentiments to. Is very good to see your words again. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
um..wow. i'm overwhelmed by the comments here, thank you all so much for stopping by. toe? i was never comfortable calling you honey. in spite of your unwanted advances we did have fun training and i wanted to share this picture of our graduation with the rest of pip.. grins |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I've had a nose job since that photo though aenimal....I look like Michael Jackson now....LOL...how ya been you prick? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now, gentle men.... LOL... Raph? Awesome job. I was surprised to see "m" become "emme"...my granddaughter's name is Emily, and she is frequently called Emme by some of them... and I had a sense of premonition that someday, someone might break her heart, but would come back with such a memory of their breakup...I don't know. It just visualized itself for me, and in my mind, she grew up to be a very beautiful [although plucky] young lady... thank you for this gift. It's a   Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
micheal jackson had surgery?! this is news to me. lol how've you been you ol' wanker!? karilea judging by genetics, i'm sure she may just break a few hearts herself |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
It's writes like this that make me realize why my muse left me... she would rather gop where the real talent is.... Simply phenominal. They took pictures of our dreams |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
dude, you got a yoda on your back man.. which is sort of interesting -- but terribly distracting to me from such a seriously fine write of universal human concern... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I just knew you had a soft side Raph, and it becomes you, beautifully. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
aww, you all crazeh, but thank you muchly. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
yeah, and my advances go ignored. (citizenship now!) |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"this is not longing but i remember" ~ Nicely put! "i'm sorry" ~ Words most men find difficult to say. I like your new photo! Who is the buff one that you are resting your paws on, Dear Animal?!?  Linda |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
"ten suns between us now" So much inbetween. Honest and sad!!! Alwayz liked your writing!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
So expressive.....good write.....and sad. ...jo |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I really like this poem. Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thank you for reading, responding and reviving this r |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Excellent. I really liked this. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
How did I miss this? echo all comments recieved and you have mine. from the heart, ~tier |
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