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Away from the Weeping Fence
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Away from the Weeping Fence |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The mist rises off the moon quiet and cool it dances with a scarf of palest pale moving to the songs of night It wraps earth with mystery and words hush to a whispered lullaby that feels the branches of the trees rock me no not like a mother I plead with the arms that hold me my eyes are closed but still I know you're there I have no sleep away from that certainty My body rocks to an inborn rhythm wild traitor to my heart's desire and all the pretty streetlights watch the way the landscape changes putting a halo on the sudden sully by the front door that is me Let me ride this pewter horse of sky into the place of dreams away from the weeping fence so that I can walk tangled into daylight running the window and sun's shadows dripping across my face |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
you are up early my lovely... and i am so glad of it and for this mystical penning.  mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" Michael Hutchence (INXS) |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
No weeping fence, no wailing walls, just hopeful and unlimited expression. Enjoyed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie You are the wonder of women.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The mist rises off the moon quiet and cool it dances with a scarf of palest pale moving to the songs of night This alone is perfect beauty, but you blessed the reader with more of your dancing voice. A pure joy to read. Love, Margherita |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"I know you're there..." ~*~ Yes... wherever the mind wanders, I know you're there. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Martie, As I read your poem, I could feel the power of the imagery and lullaby. I found myself, literally, swaying to the rhythm and words as I read parts. You write so tenderly and masterfully! I'm so glad you shared this. ~miscellanea |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
shoulda earmarked this for the library! will this time! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Filled with so many beautiful lines dear Martie.. Much enjoyed this lovely. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - so you got up and wrote like you said you would. Lots going on in this poem - you write it very well and it touches deeply - sometimes there is a lot happening while we try to get away from that fence...Paul |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
Your words start with the lightest touch of endearing moments, as if feeling the night air play gently within strands of hair. But there is passion too, with the “inborn rhythm” and this beautiful description: “Let me ride this pewter horse of sky” The colors you create with this line are worthy of a painting.. Then the desire to leave the tears that even the darkness of night cannot hide, to dance in the sunlight… You fold a wealth of emotions in this poem, forgive me for my rambling. Beautiful write. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Martie! You always paint such a vivid canvas! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I admire the way you write Martie |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Such passion painted with Martie's crayons - beautiful. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
It's hard to read, this poem....but so well done it's also hard not to. A poem of yours is always a magic carpet ride, but sometimes the ride goes through storms I wish you didn't have to weather. ~~J [This message has been edited by James_A_Fraser (04-24-2005 06:36 PM).] |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Great skill! To quote would be to quote the entire piece. Excellent. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
This was very good Martie..enjoyed these words so much.. Goldenrose. Justice cannot be for oneside alone, but must be for both. (Eleanor Roosevelt) |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Martie, your a wonder...God bless you dear lady |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Martie A child of mother earth and father sky, The moon, holds us in her grip And tells us stories of certainties; Guiding our moods, and laughter of loons, And can bring to vision, weeping fences. Your poetry draws me into myself, and makes me closely self examine... ----------ice/ford ><> |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Martie: No words move us like those which show our longing for peace and beauty in our lives. You do this so well! Hugs Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The mist rises off the moon quiet and cool it dances with a scarf of palest pale moving to the songs of night ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Let me ride this pewter horse of sky into the place of dreams away from the weeping fence so that I can walk tangled into daylight running the window and sun's shadows dripping across my face ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This is classic Martie poetry... the imagery, the personification...the heart-light shining behind the words... Elegance of free verse defined. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
When you write it comes from a place so deeply beautiful Martie! This is truly an incredible piece of art lady. Hugs! I really want to care, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
my eyes are closed but still I know you're there I have no sleep away from that certainty Even the title is sheer poetry... This touches deeply. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yes, it does, touch deeply, your images of nature that bring the reader into your realm are amazing...I find the night cold and univiting, but when I read this it makes me feel there is a whole world out there that I am numb to...sigh |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~  'Let me ride this pewter horse of sky into the place of dreams away from the weeping fence so that I can walk tangled into daylight running the window and sun's shadows dripping across my face' Ride on sweet poetess ... ride on~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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