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DavePage
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0 posted 2005-04-23 05:55 PM


Follows on again from Deep
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Growing blending throwing eons into answering the desire of loosing control

Lush was the ideas springing planting seeds that bodies would fight in their dreams to take and their minds to fight

She walked the magic physical bounded by other stone white rough hewn stretching firmly as her mind created the entrance

She knew she brought destruction and her life would be to destroy

Animals stalking were for others she stalked for need

In a world she had never sought

regards

Dave

The original words of the first ideas I left put below:

Deep within her light brown eyes ran memories of earth grass mellowed lushness
Tempered

In her spirit rang acheons of restrain in her thoughts of light fighting restrain
Answered

In her upbringing she knew of her magic
She knew large trees would grow animals stalking
In a world

In her mind she was entrapped by the chances of glory de-illusioned

In her desires she spoke of that launch that would embed her in a cosy glory of self


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passing shadows
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1 posted 2005-04-23 07:46 PM


some are just set on destruction, no matter how beautiful they are

I didn't fully understand this, but I like the way you describe her

DavePage
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2 posted 2005-04-24 10:55 AM


It is the destruction and creativity that is in all of us I was trying to reach

The power to do good and the power to do evil and the thin line between and the way we try to buttress one from the other in law for example, ethics, morals, scruples and in the end fall back to the core of ourselves

Dave

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3 posted 2005-04-24 11:18 AM


In her desires she spoke of that launch that would embed her in a cosy glory of self


Dear Dave, I felt the above sentence of your original version touching me deeply with its beauty.

No doubt we have our daily battle between destroying or creating, balance is not easy to obtain. But we have the choice.

Your searching of the depth of psyche is always interesting.

Love, Margherita  

DavePage
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4 posted 2005-04-24 11:35 AM


Margherita

I suppose I always look at the paradox

Even my critique criteria is a circle

How we justify what we do and then what was a budget bill ends up full of Senator's and Congressmen's pork for being voted in again

We do seem to have more hypocrites and liars in UK politicians however

regards

Dave

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5 posted 2005-04-24 12:59 PM


Hmmmm much like portraying the two sides I guess we all have those , also somehow we have to try and balance between highs and lows

Hope

Martie
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6 posted 2005-04-24 01:09 PM


I enjoyed reading your thoughts in this, Dave.  Deep indeed!
DavePage
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7 posted 2005-04-24 02:00 PM


HopeS

Hmmmm much like portraying the two sides I guess we all have those , also somehow we have to try and balance between highs and lows

I didn't portray a side Hope, I dont take sides.

I portrayed decisions and a feeling of power that offers corruption in the power of being more powerful.

Dave

Martie

I enjoyed reading your thoughts in this, Dave.  Deep indeed!

Martie

Many thanks for your words

I probably get as much depth in my words as I do when I watch Disney

Dave

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8 posted 2005-04-26 10:19 PM


I enjoyed this piece as well as the others.

:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

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