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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Follows on again from Deep **** Growing blending throwing eons into answering the desire of loosing control Lush was the ideas springing planting seeds that bodies would fight in their dreams to take and their minds to fight She walked the magic physical bounded by other stone white rough hewn stretching firmly as her mind created the entrance She knew she brought destruction and her life would be to destroy Animals stalking were for others she stalked for need In a world she had never sought regards Dave The original words of the first ideas I left put below: Deep within her light brown eyes ran memories of earth grass mellowed lushness Tempered In her spirit rang acheons of restrain in her thoughts of light fighting restrain Answered In her upbringing she knew of her magic She knew large trees would grow animals stalking In a world In her mind she was entrapped by the chances of glory de-illusioned In her desires she spoke of that launch that would embed her in a cosy glory of self |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
some are just set on destruction, no matter how beautiful they are I didn't fully understand this, but I like the way you describe her |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
It is the destruction and creativity that is in all of us I was trying to reach The power to do good and the power to do evil and the thin line between and the way we try to buttress one from the other in law for example, ethics, morals, scruples and in the end fall back to the core of ourselves Dave |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
In her desires she spoke of that launch that would embed her in a cosy glory of self Dear Dave, I felt the above sentence of your original version touching me deeply with its beauty. No doubt we have our daily battle between destroying or creating, balance is not easy to obtain. But we have the choice. Your searching of the depth of psyche is always interesting. Love, Margherita |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Margherita I suppose I always look at the paradox Even my critique criteria is a circle How we justify what we do and then what was a budget bill ends up full of Senator's and Congressmen's pork for being voted in again We do seem to have more hypocrites and liars in UK politicians however regards Dave |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Hmmmm much like portraying the two sides I guess we all have those , also somehow we have to try and balance between highs and lows Hope |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I enjoyed reading your thoughts in this, Dave. Deep indeed! |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
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HopeS Hmmmm much like portraying the two sides I guess we all have those , also somehow we have to try and balance between highs and lows I didn't portray a side Hope, I dont take sides. I portrayed decisions and a feeling of power that offers corruption in the power of being more powerful. Dave Martie I enjoyed reading your thoughts in this, Dave. Deep indeed! Martie Many thanks for your words I probably get as much depth in my words as I do when I watch Disney Dave |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
I enjoyed this piece as well as the others. :-) <^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world |
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