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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She lies still When morning has yet to cross the divide Between the hands of stars Grasping at light in a sky swallowed By the shadows of eternity And the split of a new sun Halved as it is into meridians That demarcate only the sweep of hands That touch nothing but our minds Her skin still bears the smooth reflection Of those efforts we make to chase away What we can’t see or touch While she breathes a subtle fog To cloak the naked swell Yet I see only the gash of stone Surrounding her with chiseled face stern And the black seam of rotten coal That smiles slightly as it erodes A tumbled crumble of loess Out of place in such warm climes But for the way she herself Has added to the cold I think of us at such times As we have in a grin of ways Laughed at the everyday passing wind Ignoring the way even stone burns Then let my mind play along Dark carbon seams Still waiting below As she lies Still in a silence of ages past And I forget to dream |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh.. damn... Ron, it is so good to read your words again m'friend... this is, I don't even have a word for this... so descriptive and full of imagery, the way you lay it out and draw us so deeply into the read, that we don't want it to end.. you make magic with words sir... thank you. I really want to care, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! I love this! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
DANG !!  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Her skin still bears the smooth reflection Of those efforts we make to chase away What we can’t see or touch While she breathes a subtle fog To cloak the naked swell" You have such a talent for blending nature/elements and flesh/emotion... I need a new binder..   "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Reading you is like listening to the winds of the Greeks/Romans, they were so passionate, so descriptive...this was truly amazing...touching |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron "Laughed at the everyday passing wind Ignoring the way even stone burns" You are an original!!  |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
"Grasping at light in a sky swallowed..." Perfect! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ron, you remain one of the major reasons why I consider free verse to be an excellent form of poetry. You make it work and work well....nicely done.  |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
:::: sigh:::: <-------sappy response....I know...but you can do that to me everytime... lol love you, my Chief~ **baby **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
..May I just say...WOW!!! You blow me away every time I read you! Thank you Sir! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
stunning - as always - i so enjoy your work Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
layers upon layers, Capt.; what a brilliant writer you are to depict this as you have. It's good to read you once again. miscellanea |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Had to go back and "dig this one up"... I was away for a few days, so its treasures like this that I look forward to  bump back to the top! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
am speechless......so...will simply stand up and **applaud** |
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