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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada 
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I know she will appreciate this. Very artistic presentation. Love, joyce |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
goodness...this makes me want to curl up and cry with you...   |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your heart sings a sad, yet ever so soft, song... Linda |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Awwww this was beautifully exporessed and ever so touching !!! I had recently written about sad songs and tracks of my tears Hope |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
A special poem done with great care by a special lady! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful, Sharon, and timely, too. I was thinking about both you and Willow yesterday as I was sitting out overlooking the ravine and the willow tree. I even mentioned it to Wayne. The buds are coming out, and the leaves are starting to unfurl in the wonderful warmth we've had the last week. It was a lovely, comforting sight.  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sharon it is so good to see you writing for Willow again.. When you write of her I feel your loss yet at the same time feel as though I knew her as well. Heart Hugs~Nancy For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sharon,  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sharon, this is a true sharing of the depth of your feelings that will never disappear for the ones you love. An excellent presentation. A splendid tribute. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Beautiful Sharon! inside and out...exactly how it feels.. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hello my friend, long time since I've seen you and vice-versa! I know how much you miss your beloved friend. How I wish I could snuggle up with you and we could cry together. Sending warm Spring thoughts and hugs from both Ron and me. Marti A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sharon....the truth and depth of your feelings touch me to the core...and I cry too! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a lovely presentation~~ M |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Thank you all for understanding. I have been so busy with life but I do come to read in Passions, always will. I keep waiting for this ache to go away, but I guess it never will. One day, when its raining I too will be dancing with her to the sound of someone's heart I imagine. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful, as you |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sharon that's lovely!! I know she appreciates the words your heart speak.  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Thank you ladies, and sweet dreams. |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
This is beautiful. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I know she's dancing upon your words - How could she not?... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Lovely in both its presentation and its bittersweet inspiration. Willow is your most giving muse. Well done poetess of the mysterious pen. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Again thank you for your kink words. It is really amazing how this ache surfaces at the craziest times. Out of no where it surfaces, and the only way I deal with it is to write a little something, so thank you for reading it yet again |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
The imagery is an interesting accompaniment to the poem. I like how the eyes are opened, but isolated, and the silhouette is dark and unseen---there's a neat conflict there, but it helps to combine the impression of looking out, even though the eyes and the silhouette seem to be facing each other. I wish you would interpret the image for me, though, because I still feel like there's a lot I'm not getting. The visual divide in the poem itself is also helpful---whether it is a change of perspective or just of subject matter, it underlines the greater shift right at the center of the poem--- First, there's the insider looking at the outside that echoes what is on the inside but never reaches it (the windowpane being between them), raindrops from both sides being unable to penetrate to the other side---a similarity of "inside and out." In the second part, I see an identification of inside and out---not looking out, but knowing out (as in, drawing in the other person you're considering by relating specifically to her). It seems like the conclusion you're coming to is that internalized relationship can break the imaginary barriers of human relation, the "windowpane" against which rain strikes from the inside and the out. If I'm right, it's a wonderful moral---but one thing I'm sure of is that it's a wonderful poem. You say you're no poet, but your years of reading experience are showing here, Sharon. This is a lovely artistic triumph. Brian "God becomes as we are that we may be as he is." ~William Blake |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Always at your best when you write with the ink of that devotion, Shar. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
In the second part, I see an identification of inside and out---not looking out, but knowing out (as in, drawing in the other person you're considering by relating specifically to her). It seems like the conclusion you're coming to is that internalized relationship can break the imaginary barriers of human relation, the "windowpane" against which rain strikes from the inside and the out. Brian, again I would like to think this that is for sure, and base each day on this premise. When you are so connected to a soul departed, they never leave you, and become almost a spirit guide in your subconscious. Thanks for the detailed comment (again, I kept it and taped it to the back of Willow's poem, as I keep all these to bring with me, when once again I see her. Karen you too lady, you too! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
stunning write for Willow Sharon, I am so glad I didnt miss this one. I really want to care, |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
moments, that give such words.....I feel as though I was watching the dance....lovely  I don’t mind spending everyday |
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