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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2005-03-31 05:19 AM

while the wind the wind

if only, i could lift
the ship-wreck from your eyes
beloved

give it wings and haul it
into other skies

the sun stares me level
and cries the tangle of you
till the weight of grief
at your feet, clings
to my heels

while the wind the wind
sings funeral songs

in a shiver
of trees with winter
beneath this southern sky

and the day
circles me like a spring

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2005-03-31 06:49 AM

Glad to know we're in the same breeze,
little one, as I wrote of the wind
just last evening, in prose...

this is a

for me!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises...

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2005-03-31 07:57 AM

while the wind the wind
sings funeral songs

yes it does that
and makes you crazy chasing it
only to become the interception
of its swansong once again

i like how you fly

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2005-03-31 10:17 AM

Maree

"if only, i could lift
the ship-wreck from your eyes
beloved"

Wonderful use of words....original and strong...like you!

Dautz Write
Member

since 2004-11-16

Posts 96

4 posted 2005-03-31 10:22 AM

Excellence in expression, Miss Dark Angel!

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

5 posted 2005-03-31 10:34 AM

this is a puddlewunderful write. good so good to read your DA.

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

6 posted 2005-03-31 10:37 AM

DA, beautifully done. The wind the wind ,
yes this is so clear and full of meaning.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

7 posted 2005-03-31 10:40 AM

Maree, this is such touching and heartfelt writing. Hugs to you doll!

Verve
Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

8 posted 2005-03-31 10:43 AM

great juxtaposition of stark contrasts in imagery used... i must say, the effect was overwhelming on me..

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2005-03-31 10:43 AM

Wonderful write!!
Love your style lady.
Hugs~Nancy

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

10 posted 2005-03-31 12:10 PM

"the sun stares me level
and cries the tangle of you
till the weight of grief
at your feet, clings
to my heels"

you always say it in such a unique way.

very nice.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

11 posted 2005-03-31 03:12 PM

the words drape beautifully in this - and I like the compassion

S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

12 posted 2005-03-31 03:37 PM

shipwrecks? with roses maybe

thank you m'lady love

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

13 posted 2005-03-31 04:33 PM

Strong verse, my favorite
"and the day
circles me like a spring"

Has ameaning to me.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2005-03-31 07:40 PM

oh I like this

this is good, yes

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

15 posted 2005-03-31 07:43 PM

Oh, I knew this was for K from the first line Maree.

Both of you, beautiful souls.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

16 posted 2005-03-31 08:31 PM

Nice...James

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

17 posted 2005-04-02 01:28 PM

the sun stares me level
and cries the tangle of you
till the weight of grief
at your feet, clings
to my heels

those lines bella...damn. as beatiful as the author and subject

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

18 posted 2005-04-02 06:44 PM

if only, i could lift
the ship-wreck from your eyes
beloved

give it wings and haul it
into other skies

the sun stares me level
and cries the tangle of you
till the weight of grief
at your feet, clings
to my heels

while the wind the wind
sings funeral songs

==============================

I wish I had wrote this...

dittoing Raph...awesome..both poet and the source of inspiration.

It's only words and words are all I have to take your heart away.

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