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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2005-03-31 11:25 PM



Tight Sleep

stars go through the darkness
running with scissors
cutting out pieces here and there
leaving holes in a stubborn sky
but I am not afraid to drift
for you say you dream
of me with a fever
and I recognize
the face of the moon

just some words cut out
from the diary of my heart



© Copyright 2005 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
majnu
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1 posted 2005-04-01 12:10 PM


smiling as i reply, i don't know what to say.

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Janette
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2 posted 2005-04-01 10:41 AM


"just some words cut out
from the diary of my heart"

Please keep "cutting," this piece is superb.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

passing shadows
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3 posted 2005-04-01 08:00 PM


cool!
Aenimal
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4 posted 2005-04-02 01:26 PM


hugs red
Huan Yi
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5 posted 2005-04-02 03:02 PM



This is good.  It's much like the
first poem of yours I read which keeps
me watching for others.
I like when you don’t get
in the way of the Eternal Feminine
in you.

John
  

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6 posted 2005-04-02 05:28 PM


Your words still give me shivers Helen.
hugs, Chris

"The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze."
Gustavo Adolfo Becquer

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2005-04-02 06:30 PM


stars go through the darkness
running with scissors
cutting out pieces here and there
leaving holes in a stubborn sky


how cool is that image and personifi....
once again I say....I wish I had wrote this.

and this....

and I recognize
the face of the moon


Ive always envied those who could create so much with so few words...my muse is long winded....
another beautiful write poetess helen.


It's only words and words are all I have to take your heart away.


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