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Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

0 posted 2005-03-26 05:23 PM

and even then
   you didn't answer me
only looked away
as if the sun didn't shine
   only clouds were visible that day

and you looked at me sideways
   as if to say

it's over

though my reply to you was

it never really began

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2005-03-26 07:07 PM

The unfinished sifts vibrant in time.
Hugs,
TD

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2005-03-26 09:25 PM

Awesome Kacy. Hugs, Chris

"The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze."
Gustavo Adolfo Becquer

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

3 posted 2005-03-28 03:22 PM

I love this Midnight

dave

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

4 posted 2005-03-28 07:37 PM

Then it makes starting over pretty hard don't ya' think.

You make brevity so admirable! I like that about you.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

5 posted 2005-03-29 04:55 PM

Excellent write!

Eric

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

6 posted 2005-03-31 12:40 PM

these lines:

and even then
you didn't answer me
only looked away

are amazingly gripping. the usage of all lowercase is so sudden, like interupting a conversation, or turning on a radio mid sentence that you focus in on what is being said to try and piece together what might have come before.

excellent.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

7 posted 2013-02-05 05:08 PM

*bump*

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2013-02-05 07:07 PM

I miss this lady a lot....
and many others do, too.

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

9 posted 2013-02-05 08:18 PM

Nod. I had to look for this one, and I really wish I had told her how well done I thought this was...

sigh

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