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Tanka (early winter)
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Tanka (early winter) |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
White curtains, tinged grey Slender fingers brush aside, Nothing there to see... * Winter sky and sidewalk empty, Birds and children gone away. . . . Note: For those of you that read my "autumn" tanka... This is about the same woman that swept the leaves in that poem...She lives on a side street in my town, in the house she was born in, eighty some-odd years ago.. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thought unseen, dark eyes Look back on all yesterdays ~ Weary lines pave paths History's definition Is in the touch of her hands |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ice, Well done, I've felt that many a morning. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done sir.. you capture the bits of emotion in such short verse.. to be applauded |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Kewl - loved the note - loved the tanka-  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Both tankas had a profound effect on this reader. VERY moving. Your sensitivity is showing! ~ and you wear it very well.  Love & Light, EA |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is very special...so much enjoyed Ford. Hugs~ Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Karilea What a beautiful poetic reply, love it.... And thanks for the bump, jumping is fun.... See More Thank you for reading...Hope you don't feel that way often... CPat Thank you..the "bits of emotion" in this poem comes from observation of my subject and belong to her..even if she does not know she was observed. Susan "loved" is a wonderful word to hear.. Than you... E.A. Love it when my words have effect.... Love and Light....also key words.. Thank you Nancy My subject is "special" without her I would not have a poem... Thanks for reading....glad you enjoyed Come read to me some poem, |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
From reading this one and the Autumn tanka, it is almost as if you are placing yourself within her and bringing to light her feelings, her sight, etc ... and really feeling it. It shows in your words. Well done. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Hello Ford, Love this tanka. Your a wiz with writing about the seasons. :-) from me to you Within this heart you'll find love |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
a good one here, short but says a lot |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
woah...loved this...short but gets so much through. ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
on the inside looking out, the path cleared. lovely. Maree into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
much enjoyed |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Well done. Thank you also for the context. INclan |
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