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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2004-11-03 08:17 PM



Not
appearance
but gesture

Motion—
Distance between
form
and symbol

How
do you measure
the depths
of a glance—
the knowing look
its happiness

Or ask a heart
to speak of whys

above
its beating

© Copyright 2004 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-11-03 08:18 PM


very cool write
Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2004-11-04 08:06 AM


::smiling:: Though I have to say, I do not often understand your comments to others or the subjects you broach...and take a different approach to those things personally...
this poem is good.. and the use of few words to convey and set the scene well executed.

well done sir...

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-11-04 08:20 AM


you encourage it...letting that person know, they're important enough to want to hear their hearts beatings...a gesture of love...care...intrest...encouraging an unfolding of thoughts...

I loved this...hugs and thank you

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
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Waukegan
4 posted 2004-11-04 07:40 PM


Thanks everyone.

Cpat Hair,

“smiling:: Though I have to say, I do not often understand your comments to others or the subjects you broach...and take a different approach to those things personally...”

Don’t take my participation on the discussion boards as more
than a curiosity as to what people think about certain issues
and the basis.  To test that basis I could easily take an
opposite stance just to see what and how convincing
the response would be.  As to my comments to others on the poetry
site, beyond the wish for an apostrophe which was hardly
a harsh critique, I think I’ve been supportive, often responding
with poems I’ve encountered that I was reminded of, (which
I stopped when I found out that that is frowned upon).

I glad there are those who like my stuff.  I tend away
from “I poems” preferring those where the speaker
subordinates or is overwhelmed by the subject,
and presents in a fashion that is seemingly unconscious
or indifferent to any other audience.  My favorite
poet in this regard is Mark Strand, whose writing,
I personally feel, revolves around a central loss.
A close second is Jane Kenyon.   I’m also
always looking for good translations of Wang Wei,
Rilke, and Juan Ramon Jimenez.  There are others,
but the list would be too long.

Thanks to those again who have expressed their
liking.

John


Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
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5 posted 2007-05-15 12:38 PM


beautiful and beautiful.

self comment is good too.

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