Open Poetry #34 |
Narragansett Bay |
Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Not appearance but gesture Motion— Distance between form and symbol How do you measure the depths of a glance— the knowing look its happiness Or ask a heart to speak of whys above its beating |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool write |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
::smiling:: Though I have to say, I do not often understand your comments to others or the subjects you broach...and take a different approach to those things personally... this poem is good.. and the use of few words to convey and set the scene well executed. well done sir... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you encourage it...letting that person know, they're important enough to want to hear their hearts beatings...a gesture of love...care...intrest...encouraging an unfolding of thoughts... I loved this...hugs and thank you |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thanks everyone. Cpat Hair, “smiling:: Though I have to say, I do not often understand your comments to others or the subjects you broach...and take a different approach to those things personally...” Don’t take my participation on the discussion boards as more than a curiosity as to what people think about certain issues and the basis. To test that basis I could easily take an opposite stance just to see what and how convincing the response would be. As to my comments to others on the poetry site, beyond the wish for an apostrophe which was hardly a harsh critique, I think I’ve been supportive, often responding with poems I’ve encountered that I was reminded of, (which I stopped when I found out that that is frowned upon). I glad there are those who like my stuff. I tend away from “I poems” preferring those where the speaker subordinates or is overwhelmed by the subject, and presents in a fashion that is seemingly unconscious or indifferent to any other audience. My favorite poet in this regard is Mark Strand, whose writing, I personally feel, revolves around a central loss. A close second is Jane Kenyon. I’m also always looking for good translations of Wang Wei, Rilke, and Juan Ramon Jimenez. There are others, but the list would be too long. Thanks to those again who have expressed their liking. John |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
beautiful and beautiful. self comment is good too. |
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