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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2005-02-08 09:54 PM

You keep telling me the earth is in order
that fractured light dances in nature,
you say its hidden in folds of chaos
embedded in the harmony of stars
&sounds like poetry

a gypsy of sorts
lining the chairs just so
to catch the next drawing
and sketch of black

the words you ache for most ?

will trickle the dawn
after some inspired night
letting fingers dance
with crescent moon

&heavens will bleed  dying stars
like primary colors ----
rain drops          breaking and falling
sinking into darkness
like trees hanging on the edge of this world

on the other side
wall and water will define its end

even their shadows will be thin, spreading,
                wandering lost

again I will lay in my aloneness
my faith untouched
                      not held within these arms

that I might see
              I am lost in grains of stars
that once held sweep of waves

midnight arrives:
the moon hung  its  stillness
on damp grass
the water held its  reflection

waiting for stone to warm and change

while     winters     gather
       to freeze the drops of water

empty in wind

~~*~~
My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
~~**~~

For Becki, because I understand.....

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-08-2005 11:29 PM).]

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2005-02-08 10:11 PM

You write with such gracefulness, Lauren. Another amazing poem...so many good phrases, I cannot pull them all out.

.......jo

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2005-02-09 06:03 AM

Lovely poem and you honor Becky with it dear. Hugs to you this morning.

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

3 posted 2005-02-09 06:24 AM

Love this! It is so very beautiful!

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2005-02-09 08:00 AM

empty in wind
love the sound of that
no handles
yet needing hands

enjoyed you here

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2005-02-09 08:35 AM

Lauren, she will know and hear this...amazing art you paint

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2005-02-09 08:48 AM

&heavens will bleed dying stars
like primary colors ----
rain drops breaking and falling
sinking into darkness
like trees hanging on the edge of this world

~*~

Lovely grains, Lauren...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2005-02-09 09:12 AM

Exquisite lines and perfect flow Lauren.
Beautiful indeed.
love ya lady~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
an invincible summer.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

8 posted 2005-02-09 09:51 AM

Utterly beautiful, the message and the poem as a poem. With every poem you give a lesson in how poetry ought to be done.

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passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2005-02-09 10:54 AM

beautiful style, beautiful words, beautiful you

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2005-02-10 06:03 PM

Enjoyed...James

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

11 posted 2005-02-11 10:43 AM

You keep telling me the earth is in order
that fractured light dances in nature,
you say its hidden in folds of chaos
embedded in the harmony of stars
&sounds like poetry

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

the words you ache for most ?

will trickle the dawn
after some inspired night
letting fingers dance
with crescent moon

&heavens will bleed  dying stars
like primary colors ----
rain drops          breaking and falling
sinking into darkness
like trees hanging on the edge of this world

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
again I will lay in my aloneness
my faith untouched
                      not held within these arms

that I might see
              I am lost in grains of stars
that once held sweep of waves
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Lauren, Lauren...I read this the other nite and was swept by its beauty...so many lines left me wishing I had wrote them...but as always your poetry is so unique that only you could. I'm always grateful to get to read your magical musings.

embedded in the harmony of stars
&sounds like poetry

yep....thats just what I was trying to say.

Among the kingdom of the winds ...
perhaps there is one of elegant mind,
who has no need to intrude on the solitude of single things.

CB

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

12 posted 2005-02-11 11:20 AM

Beautiful and moving poem, thank you ~P

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