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Rainy Day ( Midsummer
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Rainy Day ( Midsummer |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Clouds shake water from their fleece, Splashing boards and windows (no set rhythm. Wind plays tenor-harp through limbs; But it does not quicken steps of lovers Passing) faces streaked... (rain down necks, Does not dilute the moment, doesn't cool their heat. Stopping) rubbing cheek to cheek, (a long held kiss; Makeup smears on a five o'clock shadow. |
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Soulfisher Member
since 2005-01-07
Posts 226where ever the fly fishing is good |
funny how your "not smart enough to come in out of the rain" when your in love. seems loves grip makes all things fade to the distance as it carries you to drink deeper in another. nice write Ford |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ice Interesting write, enjoyed the read. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
This is a rainy day I sure wouldn't mind having!  Very nice. Vivid. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wind plays tenor-harp through limbs; But it does not quicken steps of lovers These two lines would stand very beautifully even alone. You caught the atmosphere so very well! Love, Margherita  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I much enjoyed this soaking imagery. Hmmm, now you have me wanting to stroll in the rain. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Soulfisher-See More-GG-Margherita-Kacy Thank you for the kind replies... The weather this week reminded me of summer, very warm for February..and this old scene poped into my mind... The original is a tanka.. Waste not time, lovers Do not cease, coo and billing Doves in pouring rain Take heed, time is short, Linger, touch, ignore weather But I changed the form to what shows in this post.. ___________ice ><> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool write! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
summer simmers its showers on the cold shoulder of a february morning YES !!! there is joy and hope in the world |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ford Love makes all things lovely! Your imagery took me to see this scene with clarity. As always, you write so well!  |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
This is sweet Ford. Love it and enjoyed the read :-) Within this heart you'll find love |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ford, loved the feel of this. .......jo |
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