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babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

0 posted 2004-10-28 06:38 AM

Gently, gently
awakens the crisis
of a kiss,
that does not bring love
or just not
so simply,
and is less contained
by my reticence
to take what comes to me,
quietly, waking
to the finer edge
of the silence
formed by hands
so still, touching
as one hand
holds one hand,
kept in their strict
proportions, the form
of flesh and bones
occurs in the mind,
with the gesture you make
to raise my harsh
and sudden impatience
in kisses that flower
against the vague air you move in,
waking to that sweet tremor
of silence as it erupts
and echoes back a ghost,
when you at last spoke,
gently, gently,
slow with hands
you do not move
unless, to hold me.

2004 copyright babygirLPress

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

[This message has been edited by babygirlwlove (10-28-2004 07:17 AM).]

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-10-28 06:41 AM

always look forward to reading you
outstanding poem! Thank you

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

2 posted 2004-10-28 06:43 AM

LeeJ...

thank you love, for tuning in to my madness...

lol
love&light,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2004-10-28 08:26 AM

babygirlwlove
Not spicy but very warm, enjoyed.

babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

4 posted 2004-10-28 08:31 AM

lol...thank you, Seymour..

**babygirL**

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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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5 posted 2004-10-28 09:30 AM

great ending

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

6 posted 2004-10-28 09:39 AM

thank you passing shadows...

**babygirl**

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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

7 posted 2004-10-28 10:09 AM

the anticipation can be scary and exciting at the same time..

love this.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

8 posted 2004-10-28 10:12 AM

thank you , Susan...

love&light,
**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

9 posted 2004-10-29 06:03 AM

the form
of flesh and bones
occurs in the mind,
with the gesture you make
to raise my harsh
and sudden impatience
in kisses that flower
against the vague air you move in,
waking to that sweet tremor
of silence as it erupts
and echoes back a ghost,

The above lines just blow me away.

keeping this.

Mxx

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

10 posted 2004-10-29 06:40 AM

Dark A~

thank you, love...

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

11 posted 2004-10-29 01:42 PM

Gently, gently
awakens the crisis
of a kiss,
that does not bring love
or just not
so simply,
and is less contained
by my reticence
to take what comes to me,

indeed a strong opening... well done ma'am

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2004-10-29 07:56 PM

Silky...a pleasure to read....love the title...James

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2004-10-29 08:25 PM

babygirl

How beautifully you write!

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

14 posted 2004-10-30 10:39 AM

with the gesture you make
to raise my harsh
and sudden impatience
in kisses that flower
against the vague air you move in,
waking to that sweet tremor
of silence as it erupts
and echoes back a ghost,
when you at last spoke,
gently, gently,
slow with hands
you do not move
unless, to hold me.

This is so well expressed that the tremor was contagious.

Very beautiful!

Love, Margherita

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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