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The Chaos Of Your Beauty (Valentine Challenge)
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The Chaos Of Your Beauty (Valentine Challenge) |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Fond this feeling, not strong enough this Statement-- I must raise dimension of words. Being fletched through the chest With a Cherub shaft, (bless the cripple) Has fallen me to the small Gods focus, Cupids arrow tipped with Eros poison Blurs speech, and I cannot think to speak For the Chaos of your beauty numbs my lips, And but slurred words come to voice my feelings. Such a vice is this, this amity, your eyes Beam the light of amours stare, Their Heat melting away my shyness, making me Desire the female of you; my vision shows Only red, fire in blood blinds my moral self; Thus absorbed, I cannot move but towards. Come my adorable, sup on this admiration, If there be need for such nourishment in you. Let us not chastise Saint Valentine, Who urged union of lovers, under duress. Come close, and let yourself be mine.... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Exactly so! Passionate write, so very well done! Love, Margherita  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Now, how come, whenever I have been 'hit upon' in a lounge, I've not heard such original lines? "Cupids arrow tipped with Eros poison Blurs speech, and I cannot think to speak For the Chaos of your beauty numbs my lips, And but slurred words come to voice my feelings" LOL, usually it's "Don't I know you from somewhere?" Answer =NO or, "Would you like some company?" again, usually NO Now if someone were to spout poetry? Hmmmm..... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, by name, the top four posts look like a poetic weather report. LOL |
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Soulfisher Member
since 2005-01-07
Posts 226where ever the fly fishing is good |
YOU HIT THE NAIL ON THE HEAD WITH THIS ONE ICE. I THINK I WILL MAIL THIS ONE TO A CERTAIN SOMEONE AND SEE IF SHE WOULD LIKE TO GO OUT SOME TIME. THEN AGAIN I COULD MAIL IT ANONOMOUS AND WAIT TILL THE 15TH TO ASK HER.LOL |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Brava sir, Brava!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ford You have a good line...because it sounds like the truth. I enjoyed this...Chaos indeed!!  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Nicely done - love and chaos - yep- seems about right Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
well, I'll tell ya what If someone placed a poem like this in front of my eyes, I'd follow him anywhere....hehehehhe Ford, this was awesome! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
A beautiful chaos of beauty..... bravo Sir wonderfully met!  ~~*~~ |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Still just as sweet as it was the first time I read it. :-) Within this heart you'll find love |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
but for the want of such eyes . . . Enjoyed! |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Oh yes...this was completely wonderful! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ford, oh, yes....I think you capture the beauty and the chaos well in this one. Bravo! Wishing you a happy "Chaos" Day! lol ....jo |
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