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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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He rose his skin was rippled wake foam within his curly grays dancing goodbye figurettes sadly on his chest I prayed that I hadn't seen what I saw the plate of bone protect the heart that I so loved regret knowing that he died a death as I watched in innocence of wonder as a child that this-- home between his ribs his strength iceberg just the glimpse of it sank me to my knees: It meant the end of us, and neither of us cried but we pretended that I hadn't seen as my father closed his robe saying, "Now you know," and begged coffee from the kitchen so he could die another death weeping that I'd seen. He liked it strong and black so I filled it damned near to the brim so I would take my time to bring his dignity back to him in his favorite mug. Taking careful steps of death as if my grace could save him now I placed it there before him proud I hadn't spilled a drop. Then we met each other's eyes worried of the bad omen of my perfect servitude, laughing at the joke we were just me and him again. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Incredible, Serenity! I can vividly imagine the scene and feel the emotions. I love your sensitivity and keen and creative eye for detail. sadie |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Just had to come back and grab this for my library! It reminds me of the time after my dad's open heart surgery-- Rough times, but times where true dignity displayed itself. You write of it so well... Of all your great poetry, this is my favorite. in greatest admiration, and humbled to one sooo wise, I bow to you! oh, enjoyed tea time,too! sadie |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 <--better with practice?love you lady  |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
This brought back memories, not sure why, but it did, this inspired my poem "Beyond the Ending" which happened over 40 years ago. Gloom |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, another  to the poetswho whisper through the night... |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
quite sad, yet more impressive |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
amazing write. *AIM = Alli4000* Journal! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen....touching screen with a ...I'm so proud of you for writing this! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I so understand this - and it brings tears to my eyes - big hug - susanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd lady  |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
This is love as well as it could be written (and shamefully I'm jealous, not of the write but of the memory) Poets against the war is redundant |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
tears welling in my eyes.. this is so very touching, so very beautiful love you m'lady Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you My father and I didn't even have to talk to communicate, we were so fine-tuned to each other's moods that we quite often did this silent dance of understanding to communicate. It's fortunate to know just one person like that in a lifetime. For that person to be your father is a miraculous blessing. I'm very fortunate to have had that, and I'm equally lucky to have friends who understand when I miss him. thank you all so very much |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
filled it damned near to the brim so I would take my time to bring his dignity back to him in his favorite mug. Oh, lady... for me, it was my mother... and she always wanted a half cup... I remember when I brought her just that... a mug that was only a half-circle, emblazoned on the front with "you asked for half a cup of coffee?"... and in the silliness of that moment, the knowing stepped aside and it was just me and her... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Smiling a very misty smile atcha |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"He liked it strong and black so I filled it damned near to the brim so I would take my time to bring his dignity back to him in his favorite mug." This was so visual, Karen. A simply beautiful poem with so much meaning, simple elegance, and love, and I am grateful you shared it. *hugs* jo |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
You were blessed, K, and we understand, if only in absence. Thank you for sharing him the way you do. e |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity...I must say this was very touching I do believe you have a special gift of touching people with your words, cause you sure have touched me. I have a special relationship with my daughter like the one you and your father had. I could really tell you about the closeness we share but then you already know through your relationship with your father...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
just wanted you to know I read this the other nite and hugged you thru the screen.  Among the kingdom of the winds ... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Karen~ I have read and re-read this many times, I should've let you know that.....and wanted to say now how deep this touches and how powerful the emotional bond is..... ~~*~~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Daddy |
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