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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2005-01-29 01:03 AM




time slides quietly

frozen moonbeams left behind

Winter’s grinding pace


parking lot prisms

reflections of the season

windows of the soul


moments remembered

pain’s absence isn’t pleasure

heartache’s soft recall

©2005 by icebox

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2005-01-29 01:37 AM


"pain’s absence isn’t pleasure"
such a simple truth too often forgotten

Honeybunch
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2 posted 2005-01-29 02:20 AM


Yes, in order to be we need to feel.
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3 posted 2005-01-29 02:38 AM


well understood
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4 posted 2005-01-29 03:16 AM


"pain’s absence isn’t pleasure"

hmm.

Pain's absence isn't pleasure.

Pain's absence isn't pleasure.

Pain's absence isn't pleasure.

Pain's absence isn't pleasure.

Pain's ab--

OH.

I was going to type that five hundred times, then I realized I could "copy and paste."



Pain's absence isn't pleasure?

sigh

It sure feels that way in the moment.

But I quibble.

Pain's absence isn't happiness, I nod and concede.



Damn, I love you.



thank you yet again

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5 posted 2005-01-29 10:23 AM


Since you joined a couple of years ago, all of your verse has gained (PIP works!)...but in this mode the difference is striking....clearer, deeper, cleaner, more compelling. Well done, mon!

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Martie
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6 posted 2005-01-29 11:13 AM


icebox

All you wrote is so clear, but this "pain’s absence isn’t pleasure", made me stop and think, then nod.  I hope you have warmed up a bit!  

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