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Unpardonable night
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Unpardonable night |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Its one of those unpardonable nights The kind, before which, the Sun doesn’t set So much as it gathers all the warmth in the land And flees, cowering behind the horizon Not enough wood exists For the woodstove to burn away the spiderwebs Of hoarfrost from the windowpanes And there is too much Moon Pregnant and bloated, it spills itself into the shack Settling in cold blue puddles on the walls and floor The birds feel it too They become statuary, fearing rightfully, that a cry Or a creak might fracture the world So soon, when I put down this pen I’ll climb the short flight up to the loft, hoping To find a few crumbs of warmth Still residing under the blankets Leftover from other nights, other beds |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Stay warm Yeti....  It's damn cold here today too. ------------------------------------ Soon, when I put down this pen I’ll climb the short flight up to the loft, hoping To find a few crumbs of warmth Still residing under the blankets Leftover from other nights, other beds Perhaps, the memories will warm you. Well done Ed. The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Makes me feel guilty for feeling cold in 50 degree weather.. Take care of yourself and stay warm!  |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
quite nice. i enjoyed this one |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I always enjoy your poetry |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Using left over food or sleep I've done many times. Enjoyed |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Not too cold here today... but there's still a different kind of warmth that comes from the covers. Great write. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Too Beautiful...and you. So when are we going to du-et again Bro?  Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Loads of fantastic imagery, Wranx. You know, I keep picturing this "shack" as you fondly call it. One day you'll have to post a picture of it for us! Corinne |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Oh, I know this night - and the chill in the tile floor - the climb to the loft - the freeze of the sheets - the wood stove having lost its flame some time before my return to the cabin - brrrrr Very vivid imagery - actually, it rather made me miss the chill winter nights on the mountain - The ending on this is excellent - painful, but well cut Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Well -- that was quite a ride, my friend.... your imagery here is superb -- as good as imagery gets in this language, and probably any other. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Even with higher outside temps and a heater blasting dry air onto me, I seek that leftover warmth, too... Excellent write!!! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
The cold isn't always in the night, is it Brother. Well written! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I was already feeling the cold up here in Ontario ~ You have now added to my chill with your vividly descriptive writing! You have a gift ~ and I am so pleased that you share it with your fellow Pipsters!  Love & Light of Moon, Linda |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Just caught myself complaining about it being chilly in here because the thermostat was set at 70 instead of 72.....I do miss the fireplace though; Ratette won't let me burn it because I just got through painting the ceiling and she doesn't want to stain it with the leftover smoke......! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Eddie? Stay warm . . . |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The moon was exceptionally full this cold January... full, and close, ponderously close... and puddled the snow in blue... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write! ~Alli~ *AIM = Alli4000* Journal! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I saved this one to come back to, as I knew I'd be having one of these.... rain rain rain rain rain watchin' the river run  (and I know there's a moon somewhere laughing her ass off too) |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Ed, you just get better and better. Awesome! ~tier |
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