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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2005-01-27 10:11 AM


This shell,  opaque
encompasses my
fragility
while holding in
fragments
of what
is left  of me

I feel suns
amber rays
trying to warm
the edges of
    this chill of sigh,
and I can hear
the rush        of life

swirling by.

With fists clenched
        I hammer away
trying to break free...

my screams
fall silent,
passers by
cannot hear
my cry    of plea.

This shell
     now hardened
will not easily     break
but still;

I scratch and claw
trying to create
a fissure
that would allow
my soul     escape
from this cocoon
of emotions
that have wrapped
themselves
to tightly around me

suffocating
the     fantast
of who
I used to be....




The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (01-28-2005 11:09 AM).]

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2005-01-27 10:24 AM


GentlestSpirit~
You are beautifully poetic~

This is a word-rich penning~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Catrina
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2 posted 2005-01-27 10:33 AM



What a marvelous outpouring!
Brava!

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2005-01-27 10:46 AM


awesome!
JL
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4 posted 2005-01-27 10:48 AM


Very nice.  Awesome for sure!

JL

LeeJ
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5 posted 2005-01-27 10:54 AM


you are as beautiful inside as well as out..fantastic write, pain, understanding, and hope which brings change.
RSWells
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6 posted 2005-01-27 11:11 AM


Well whatever you do don't allow a hard boil to occur. Maybe a gifted cook will scramble along and poach you on a pedestal or better still two over easy (and not be an egg benedict-arnold) Amazing how durable that shell can be considering. As always enjoyed your sharing (and you know this was me just yoking)

Poets against the war is redundant

Susan
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walking the surreal
7 posted 2005-01-27 11:21 AM


passionately and achingly beautiful in expression - Donna - your words move me

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

littlewing
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8 posted 2005-01-27 12:31 PM


Good God, Donna, this reminded me of
Pink Floyd's, "The Wall."

Amazing writing, Lady and I love your picture, you look so cute all warm and stuff.

*smile*

Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2005-01-27 01:58 PM


Marge, you are a doll.  Thank you.  *s*

Catrina, *lil curtsie* and a big thank you!

Dixie and JL, thank you both for the awesome.  
Yer both pretty awesome yourselves.  *w*

awwww...Lee, you make me blush thank you for
that....

Richard two over easy minus the
pedestal and the benedict-arnold sounds lovely. I would like to think someday a gourmet might put something on my plate that I just wouldn't be able to turn down...but then, I guess we all wish for that at different times in our lifetimes..lol.
As far as hard boiling, perhaps just a bit poached??  lol.
Thank you for your humor and for the smile.

Susan, your words touch me and I am glad
that mine make sense to you!

Suz, you have no idea of how much of a compliment I take that as.  As to the new pic, was just having fun one day with the cam phone.  lol.  It was COLD outside
that day!  Hugzz you.


The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Snow
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10 posted 2005-01-31 10:11 AM


there is so much here that i relate to on one level or another.... including the hammer....but i hope that you never know that particular reason.

thank you for sharing this with me and for your note... your heart and words are felt deeply.

hugs..
S~

~~~~~~~
"so I wait for you like a lonely house
till you will see me again and live in me.
Till then my windows ache" ~neruda

vandana
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11 posted 2005-01-31 11:01 AM


nice write
inkedgoddess
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12 posted 2005-01-31 11:56 PM


suzie hears pink floyd
i hear smashing pumpkins
anyhow, whoever, whatever
i hear a lovely voice come through despite the shell or no shell

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