Ouspeaking the Tell Lie Heart (Speak up, Speak Loud)

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Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

0 posted 2005-01-26 11:33 PM

(Yeah this is just a stream of consciousness poem that attempted to help with this little case of writers black that i've had. The poem will have a meaning sooner and later.)

you can't outspeak
your tell lie heart
speak up, speak loud
this untelling heartbeat
is deafening
those underground obnoxious
ramblings of numb tongues
fall throughout rusted vents
you were overheard
and uncared for
those raging passionate eyes
split from within
cycle glass
and shatter it across
skulls of willing bastards
all for your fault
tie these hands down
with mail order barbed wire
tearing thoughts
into shards of air
carried across
the screaming wind
fanning the over heated
and feeding the flame
of forlorn happiness
understanding, step off
to the side of most thoughts
untied shoes
falling off overgrown feet
march across
filtered highlands
burning ash from
heavenly cigars
descend with
burning prophecies
that fill mens
eyes and ears
with nonsense haze
leading more and more
blinded through holes
in truth
to sepreate misguided
downfalls

nice use of muffin

aim= FlyingScrew and EtherealCriminal. message me if you feel.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-01-27 08:50 AM

whewwwww, a very intense unraveling...the images and visuals were astouding...

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-01-27 08:52 AM

Seems to be a very angry stream...
it will be interesting to see how
this plays out in future poems.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

3 posted 2005-01-27 01:45 PM

sharp edges to well honed images - a tumble of emotion here - and some of it spoke very loudly some of my own emotions from a time ago-

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2005-01-27 05:49 PM

Yeah. Excellent visuals.

JL

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

5 posted 2005-01-27 06:05 PM

One cannot help but feel the power and passion of these words...well done...

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

6 posted 2005-01-27 11:23 PM

Thank you all very much for reading. When i wrote this particular stream i was in sort of a firey mood and apparently my pen carried that to the page.

the comments are much appreciated. Stop in anytime you would like. Maybe next time i'll have snacks.

nice use of muffin

aim= FlyingScrew and EtherealCriminal. message me if you feel.

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

7 posted 2005-01-27 11:39 PM

you have burned my eyes with this one..whew!

the truth lies inside your words, you have put this feeling in its place!

~Loved it
ARH

Come,love all of me, mind, body, spirit..feel my passion, taste of me, be filled completely!

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

8 posted 2005-01-28 08:04 PM

Oh i'm sorry about that, would you like some ice for those burns?

thanks for stopping by for my scalding read.

nice use of muffin

aim= FlyingScrew and EtherealCriminal. message me if you feel.

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