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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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When we arrived last April, locals warned us about the trade winds: one could go mad from their keening -- Like women in a constant mourning, they are, faces of the lost replayed with each wail! Build a break, that’s the only way, said the town grocer as he handed me ripe guavas and apple-bananas, of trees or fences or glass, anything to shield you from that relentless blast! Our cottage backs to cypress trees, I explained again and again, although I pictured their boughs hell-bent on heading East. Oh cypress, they exclaimed, them’s the worst! Trees made of limbs from the dead! Tear them out, put up a wall instead! A fair price for paradise, I’d say as we lay awake each night while banana palms slapped the house and our front gate slammed open and shut. The old timers never told us about the fog. Now January bleeds into February, a fixed landscape of sea-and-sky slate, a charcoal sketch scratched out by a frustrated artist. For me, madness is monochrome. [This message has been edited by Corinne (01-21-2005 05:02 PM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
January bleeds into February, an unchanged landscape of nothingness – sea-and-sky twin mirrors; a sketch scratched out by an unsatisfied artist. damn I love the way you write Corinne... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
was going to pick out specific lines, but rereading it how could, i seperate any one when together they created this? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sweetheart... you captured her perfectly! You even made me homesick! |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
This is perfect. If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
January bleeds into February, an unchanged landscape of nothingness – sea-and-sky twin mirrors; a sketch scratched out by an unsatisfied artist. Oh how I've missed readiing you Corinne. Absolutely magnificent! and a  Maree  and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
 ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a good one enjoyed the view |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your poem has such power... and what a fantastic last line!!! Excellent!! |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
I remember the "trades" as being rather sensuous. Anything but menacing. Different time, different place . . . enjoyed this glider |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like this! The imagery ois fantastic. Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Corrine, you paint superbly. ~tier |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks guys! Corinne |
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