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Faded Music {from the ramble series}
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Faded Music {from the ramble series} |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Do you remember the sounds of yesterday when laughter was the music our souls danced to, a time when speaking was not needed because our eyes said more than words could ever say, how a sometimes not so accidental brush of hand in subtle touch could make two hearts race to the very same place until we were speeding through the night like a freight train with no brakes; so we would just ride out the storm until we ran out of tracks then lay new ones down as we blazed our own trail across midnight skies riding the stars into tomorrow, falling into the new day standing side by side; when winds blew fiercely trying to toss and tumble us into the unknown sometimes causing us to stumble and we would throw caution to the wind but we always found our footing.... continuing side by side? Somewhere along the way the music faded into the sounds of yesterday.... Do you still remember....us? The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Do you remember the sounds of yesterday when laughter was the music our souls danced to" Such a heart ache of a melancholy write Donna. You had me from the first lines above. This is beautiful in it's pause to reflect on the past. Love ya lady~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Thanks Nancy for bearing with my words while I work through it....your precious to me. Hugs. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Donna - this is incredible - so heart felt, and I went upon the journey with you - and sorrowed at the end - Hugs  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Some lovely, original lines, mixing with some heart worn times... well done, little one... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh goodness Donna! this is bittersweet... you pulled me swiftly through every word i feel this  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
bittersweet as Muted stated...."yesterday"....seems like so long ago....a time forgotten till now....miss those "yesterdays"....sadly, they are gone forever..and tomorrow will probably not repeat history...at least for me....this was an incredible piece of work Gentle one... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Somewhere along the way the music faded into the sounds of yesterday.... Do you still remember....us? *************** Happens way too often to way too many. A question that I am sure many of us have you and you bring up your point wonderfully in this. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
It reminded me of a lot of things from a lot of words It was good to hear them so succinct Dave |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
aww Donna, this one stuck in my chest . . . it also reminded me of something good though, too . . . I was in a record (yes LP's-vinyl) store the other day and God, I just love albums and what you wrote brought me back there too. *smile* |
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Margot Member
since 2003-10-04
Posts 154 |
Wonderful Love is something eternal, The aspect may change, But not the essence.- Vincent Van Gogh |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
understanding |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
amazing... ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A love that once had us roaring down a track is one we never forget...and yes, we often wish that yesterday would again come to us and stay if but just a little while. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Very honest... full of love, and loss without omission of hope. Well done. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Donna, this was written with compassion and hope...lovely write...enjoyed this much |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Keep writing I love your rambles!   ~~*~~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yup, I do, not you and him...but him and me...hehe... Powerful powerful write with tons of visuals and assuridly love.... Very much enjoyed this.... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
"how a sometimes not so accidental brush of hand in subtle touch could make two hearts race to the very same place" That wasn't a dream then? I too wonder if ever past loves ever allow our memories to surface from the subconscience...and if there is a twinge of longing there, however brief or quickly extinguished. That was my favorite stanza. I'm glad this came back up. You have an honest face and beautiful eyes. Poets against the war is redundant |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
You are all far to kind and I am humbled by your replies, I am grateful.  Richard I am sure that is not just a dream and never should be just a dream. Sometimes a recalled thought of yesterdays gone by do seem to rise to the top and we can only enjoy it or be hurt by it in the remembering. The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
A very poignant write. Eric |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
tender the touch as a breeze comes and goes in one moment felt this one, lovely |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Wow.....Just wow....  "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Eric, Mish, and Stac....thanks so much! Ya'll are wonderful.  |
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