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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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0 posted 2005-01-22 03:57 AM

talk thirsty
sucking
succulence
I don't want you anymore
I wish I could put you away
and never have to think of more
of all the varied rhyme of these:

Here
there is
this lonely space
talk thirsty
and my dusty knees
were once a hymn
I sang to God
once I sang
to be forgave
wavering my prayers
treble
oblique
et tu
(and you?)
I pray,
I pray, for you
for you, my youth -

I dug the grave
and whistled moon:

like the nails that bent soft wood
traveling the under-route
of the castle's fortitude
grinning teeth of fated gate
damn the throbbing
absolute
bobbing past the sleepy guard.

Blot the bleed
forgive my greed
of all I-want-and-I-have-not
god I feel so bad tonight
the pores between the hairs are screams:

Open open sesame!
cask amontillado needs
a rusty iron peg
of dread
death by inches
has me beg
just another day
of dead

broken at the knees.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (01-22-2005 05:44 AM).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2005-01-22 05:25 AM

Karen?...

This one hits hard and deep...

I don't have the words...

so just ...

Love you, lady...

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-01-22 05:42 AM

Open open sesame!
cask amontillado needs
a rusty iron peg
of dread

~*~

Why is it this makes me think
that even though we lose,
sometimes we still win?

I don't know...but

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2005-01-22 07:50 AM

"k"

I'll have the white omelette with crawfish tails in mozzarella (known as Zip's # 9 in the Cellar) and a nice Bloody Bull too, but make it translucent, if y'wanna see a tip.

and um, yeah, the shrimp cocktail if you must, but? I prefer the fried crab claws breaded with parmesan and sharp white cheddar--garlic sauce--tell Tina at the bar I said "hey" too.

and hey lady, this is for you...(fertive movements)

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

4 posted 2005-01-22 08:00 AM

"...I sang to God
once I sang
to be forgave..."

I have never found her in a forgiving mood,
but then
again
it might just be
the differences in gender.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2005-01-22 08:03 AM

grin

(I think she likes me.)

I'll put in a word for you.

*laughing*

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

6 posted 2005-01-22 08:09 AM

Thud! Excuse me. That was just my jaw hitting the floor. This is absolutely freakin' great. Loved it!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2005-01-22 09:40 AM

serenity,
Of the two who has the coup?

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2005-01-22 09:48 AM

plain and simple, a powerful point

"I don't want you anymore
I wish I could put you away
and never have to think of more
of all the varied rhyme of these:"

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

9 posted 2005-01-22 11:03 AM

A woeful write of a life walking backwards unconcerned at the destination but just going with the flow. See you made me think....I think.

Poets against the war is redundant

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2005-01-22 12:37 PM

I pray, for you
for you, my youth -

I dug the grave
and whistled moon:

like the nails that bent soft wood
traveling the under-route
of the castle's fortitude
grinning teeth of fated gate
damn the throbbing
absolute
bobbing past the sleepy guard.

Blot the bleed
forgive my greed
of all I-want-and-I-have-not
god I feel so bad tonight
the pores between the hairs are screams:
==========================================

*heavy sigh*

because you are so special to me, I can not read this and not feel you in every word, and want to hug you....and yet...because I respect your talent so, and am always awed by your gift of expression, I can not read your work, no matter what the confess of express and NOT be impressed by the depth of the talent...

sometimes I feel like a (you know)
cuz I read and know...but cant help but smile and shake me head and say damn... look at her go....

ya know?

Among the kingdom of the winds ...
perhaps there is one of elegant mind,
who has no need to intrude on the solitude of single things.

CB

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2005-01-22 06:47 PM

hugging my Jan first

thank you lady and happy anniversary

wince

that hurt today

grin

Evoc Verse? gotta watch the chin baby, that can smart, I know

and hugging Richard too, just because I wasn't even sure what I was trying to say, and you summed it up so nicely for me.

Thanks all, very much.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

12 posted 2005-01-22 07:57 PM

the pores between the hairs are screams:

WOW! so much said in the above line alone.

Incredible you.

Mxx

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

13 posted 2005-01-22 10:02 PM

Wow...very powerful write...

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

Denise

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14 posted 2005-01-23 09:09 AM

Very powerful indeed. I can feel every word.

Well done, Karen.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

15 posted 2005-01-23 09:35 AM

you nailed much more than soft wood with this'un

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

16 posted 2005-01-23 10:04 AM

damn the throbbing
absolute
bobbing past the sleepy guard.

The depth of your expressions gives me vertigo...

Great job!

Love, Margherita

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

17 posted 2005-01-23 08:03 PM

"Blot the bleed
forgive my greed
of all I-want-and-I-have-not
god I feel so bad tonight
the pores between the hairs are screams"

you take those thoughts from my head that I could never articulate...and make them so real.

and I adore you for it.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

18 posted 2005-01-24 01:06 PM

I spent the weekend at this church camp with about 100 other kids... I helped out as a counselor with a small group but with my health I couldn't do most of the stuff so I'd head to the river. There was a tree there that leaned across the water and it's roots were spread out above ground...

Usually saying you have bruised and splintered knees from praying is just a way to explain it... a metaphor, I guess.

Not this time.

Didn't mean to go off on my own subject in trying to tell you how great your poetry is. Just wanted to find a way to say that I get it. And I love it.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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