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RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2005-01-25 09:26 PM

Perhaps you see me in some hound’s-tooth twill
On which two suede and oval emblem’s claim
My elbows must be muffled from their shrill,
Pretentious and (you must think) haughty aim
Of ostentatious flourishes I muse
Upon in pipe smoked ball and clawed wing chairs,
Surrendering plain spoken words to choose
Yacht taught ego-testical bought airs
Or worse, that I desire to here acquaint
Unsuspecting others to some plot,
Ruse, canard or something else I ain’t,
Assumptions Sir I’ll have you know are rot,
Surrendering to nothing but the words
Such is my motivation undeterred

Poets against the war is redundant

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2005-01-25 09:48 PM

Well the image was kind of cool actually - you in a Ralph Lauren blazer, with a pipe. You might then do your hand-writing of poetry in a soft Hermes' leather journal with your Mont Blanc, instead of scraps of paper, and stubs of HB3's

Somehow I think the poetry would not be near as good. I sure liked this one, can you tell? I have people who assume myself, and when they do I sure make it worth their while.

Carpe' Diem

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2005-01-25 09:58 PM

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blustering and brutal, but true to the poet's pen as always, passionately done

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2005-01-25 10:09 PM

I'm so guilty, and what a price I paid.

This is a stark message and delivered with brutal honesty,
so I'll suck it up, even though it hurts.
I thank you for indulging me, RSWells.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2005-01-26 08:12 AM

brava Richard!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2005-01-26 08:22 AM

Pretentious

amazing how people perceive one another~~~
without really knowing

it's all in the heart though Richard~~

M

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2005-01-26 08:28 AM

Excellent, Sir...
the old adage of
walk in my heels...

Bravo.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2005-01-26 09:11 AM

RSWells
Your elegance of phrase does amaze. Enjoyrd

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

8 posted 2005-01-26 09:24 PM

Great write!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

9 posted 2005-01-26 11:06 PM

holy crap batman. wow. I am ashamed to say this is only the second poem of yours I have read. *runs off to find all the others knowing they have to be just as awesome or better* =)

How can I stand here and not be moved by you? - Lifehouse

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

10 posted 2005-01-27 11:38 AM

I think I've missed something - but not the well written sharp edge of this -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2005-01-27 11:44 AM

chuckling* for some reason, I just do not see you as being pompous at all. I truly did enjoy this acrostic!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

12 posted 2005-01-27 11:45 AM

Surrendering to nothing but the words
Such is my motivation undeterred

now don't go thinking these were my only two favorite lines, they weren't...loved the entire poem...you really can shake the tallest of trees, turning them into golden voice....tremendous write, as all of yours are...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2005-01-27 11:54 AM

incredible

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

14 posted 2005-01-27 11:28 PM

What can be said that has not been said,
I second all the above and then some more~

Great work! a fine poet you are sir!

~ARh

Come,love all of me, mind, body, spirit..feel my passion, taste of me, be filled completely!

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

15 posted 2005-01-28 07:14 PM

"Assumptions Sir I’ll have you know are rot,
Surrendering to nothing but the words
Such is my motivation undeterred"

Should you be punished for fluency, for elegance even? I say Rot! You have studied and you have written, and all the while taught others. I say thank you sir for being you, you are words and ideas and thought,and not with ease did you live your life. But your having lived it your way,you have become a man of words. marty

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