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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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Still it's hard to understand why breathing hurts like Hell. Why all they have to tell me is, "There's nothing we can tell." I wish that "pain" was really just some stupid metaphor. And I wish that I was lying down... not falling on the floor. Walking shouldn't be like this: each step a piercing test. And sitting down hurts far too much to let my body rest. Joints and muscles should relax, not pull and grind and sting. But everyday it seems I'm pained by ordinary things. He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dearest Alyssa, I continue to pray, whatever good it does...and wish I could help your suffering... may you find comfort somewhere love ya girl |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was a perfect example of life's tremendous sorrow another can cause someone else's life... Joining Passing in prayer, wishing and hoping all folds right in your life....keep writing and we'll keep reading. Love you... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
*hugs* first. Sometimes I wish there was no such thing as pain. Only God knows the answer to that one. Hope you get to feeling better, sweet one. Your poem is written so well....you keep it up, girl. That writing may someday make our literary hall of fame, you're a wonderful poet, Alyssa, because you have that ability to reach out and make us feel what you are saying.  .....jo |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
 hugs and prayers headed your way |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey you... feeling this hope your pain IS a metaphor |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Dix, you've been faithful about is since the beginning. Can't even understand how much I appreciate that. Thank you. And love ya, too.  LeeJ, thanks for your reply. You always see different edges to things which I love hearing about. Very insightful. And thank you for the prayers and hopes... They're quite appreciated. Love ya, too. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Jo, thank you. You compliment me far too much! I'm just a kid who writes 'cause it's the closest thing to help that there is. And because I get to meet some really awesome people. Someday, I'm sure, God will shed some light on the whole pain thing... Until then, well, at least He's teaching me things. You're always so kind, thank you for that...mgroves, Thanks! I could never tire of either! Both seem to be needed lately... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Ser, hey... not this time... no. But I wish it was, too. That's okay, breathing is overrated anyway lol ...and at least I get to meet some interesting people and doctors because of it. Thanks for the hope though... really.Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Goood poem. I like the line where you say you wish that pain was a metaphore. Nice line. Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Juju, thank you. I'm glad you liked it. And I always love knowing what parts people like most, so thank you for that too. Hope things are well for you Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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