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James_A_Fraser
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0 posted 2005-01-14 06:21 PM



Lips, Wax

blow the
candle
out
and the
flame
goes quiet
for now,
burning
done....

lips still
close,
warm from
the very
nearness
as they
stilled
the wick's
heat....

and the
wax, soft
liquid
turning
milky,
slow
slow to
cool....

both
already
waiting,
waiting,
lips, wax,
to ignite
again....

© Copyright 2005 James A. Fraser - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2005-01-14 06:30 PM


Jamie......sigh!

Woodwind

Like mauve you float
your voice flickering

a candle

Have you danced this way before
with bones curved
and covered with gauze?

Warm at the door
I step out on the air

hold still

I’m dipped over backwards and filled

SEA
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with you
2 posted 2005-01-14 06:52 PM


oh this is WONDERFUL!!

big smiles

Sunshine
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3 posted 2005-01-15 08:55 AM


I so love
when responses
match
a poem...

see the flames dance...

Broken_Winged_Angel
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4 posted 2005-01-15 08:59 AM


Very creative   I really enjoyed how the words are layed out resembling a candle stick.  


scorpio
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5 posted 2005-01-15 09:03 AM


Most expressive in its simplicity James.  I enjoyed this very much.

believe in what your heart feels...

passing shadows
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6 posted 2005-01-15 09:07 AM


an awesome piece...easy to read, nice ending
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7 posted 2005-01-15 03:39 PM




~Alli~

Happy 2005!

Dark Angel
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8 posted 2005-01-15 03:48 PM


Would both sides of a flame be identical?

Enjoyed Jamie

M

all I can taste is this moment, all I can breathe is your life, cause sooner or later it's over, I just don't want to miss you tonight.~GooGooDolls~

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9 posted 2005-01-24 12:19 PM


My initial reaction was lost as I read the responses... but an additional read of your great poem was sheer treat... more than worth the loss of my poor words. *S* Wonderful work! *S*
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