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James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2005-01-14 06:21 PM

Lips, Wax

blow the
candle
out
and the
flame
goes quiet
for now,
burning
done....

lips still
close,
warm from
the very
nearness
as they
stilled
the wick's
heat....

and the
wax, soft
liquid
turning
milky,
slow
slow to
cool....

both
already
waiting,
waiting,
lips, wax,
to ignite
again....

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2005-01-14 06:30 PM

Jamie......sigh!

Woodwind

Like mauve you float
your voice flickering

a candle

Have you danced this way before
with bones curved
and covered with gauze?

Warm at the door
I step out on the air

hold still

I’m dipped over backwards and filled

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2005-01-14 06:52 PM

oh this is WONDERFUL!!

big smiles

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2005-01-15 08:55 AM

I so love
when responses
match
a poem...

see the flames dance...

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere

4 posted 2005-01-15 08:59 AM

Very creative

I really enjoyed how the words are layed out resembling a candle stick.

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

5 posted 2005-01-15 09:03 AM

Most expressive in its simplicity James. I enjoyed this very much.

believe in what your heart feels...

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2005-01-15 09:07 AM

an awesome piece...easy to read, nice ending

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

7 posted 2005-01-15 03:39 PM

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2005-01-15 03:48 PM

Would both sides of a flame be identical?

Enjoyed Jamie

M

all I can taste is this moment, all I can breathe is your life, cause sooner or later it's over, I just don't want to miss you tonight.~GooGooDolls~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2005-01-24 12:19 PM

My initial reaction was lost as I read the responses... but an additional read of your great poem was sheer treat... more than worth the loss of my poor words. *S* Wonderful work! *S*

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