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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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0 posted 2005-01-13 04:12 PM


you dipped your pen in my skin
and wet the end
in a tattoo

you wore your parchment armor
with thigh high margins
that seamed kind of sexy

seamless seemed less,  heals too
in heels you didn't need
at the top of my stares

but the stairs were lovelier
when you were their reason
and your coming down

was my going up to heaven

______________

dark

© Copyright 2005 ┬ęDark 2k - All Rights Reserved
DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

1 posted 2005-01-13 04:18 PM


You written something that is good but it is almost as if you are trying to put people off from reading.

I can follow the change of spellings and ideas and it has power, under-currents and un-explored images but it does seem as if you dont want people to read it.

Dave

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
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2 posted 2005-01-13 04:20 PM


baby you drip your pen sublime

siphon some ink from me

and dip me, one more time

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2005-01-13 04:24 PM


dave..thanks guy..it is intentional yes

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ms inky, thanks lady for your eyes

Catrina
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4 posted 2005-01-13 04:31 PM



A whole new interpret
of stairway to heaven...

this works
no matter how it's spelled,
bewitching as it is...

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
5 posted 2005-01-13 04:33 PM


your words have eyes...that always see more

M

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2005-01-13 04:33 PM



ms maureen...thanks lady friend for your eyes
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ms catrina
mmmm spellbound reply ms thanks to you

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
7 posted 2005-01-13 04:33 PM


this is beautiful d- your ink colors me happy -

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2005-01-13 04:35 PM


ms susan

then my ink is worthy of the shadows it makes
thanks to you for your weave spend

Cpat Hair
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9 posted 2005-01-13 04:44 PM


Well amigo... you never fail to intrigue me with your word play and to amaze me with the way you paint images and moments...always juxtaposed it seems in a bit of some real....

not sure why it puts someone off.... but I'm always wanting to read what you write...

Gentle Spirit
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10 posted 2005-01-13 05:02 PM


me thinks every thing you do is intentional ROTFLMAO

and the way you paint?  anyone would be honored to be your canvas.   

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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11 posted 2005-01-13 05:08 PM


Cpat...humble bows amigo
you grace me with your reads...thanks guy.

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-
GS, you need a good huggin...thanks lady for your touches

*Alli4000*
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12 posted 2005-01-13 06:38 PM


I enjoyed this!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

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