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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2005-01-11 07:31 AM


An Alter

She sits upon a throne of goal
A phantom of a longing soul
A spirit born within a sigh
The working of the ego I

Placed within an Ivy tower
Symbol of romances power
She took her place the queen of style
And answered to the king of wile

The essence of my ecstasy
The flower of my fantasy
The omni of the world of dream
The symbol of forever’s theme

An Eden built as God had done
And rebuilt in the eye of one
It is the force of Adam’s coup
That lives of course each morning’s dew

For Eden never spoke of death
And stays the essence of Gods breath

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1 posted 2005-01-11 07:40 AM


An Eden built as God had done
And rebuilt in the eye of one
It is the force of Adam’s coup
That lives of course each morning’s dew

Nature at her finest sleek and flowing white gown, even has those moody moments....but even then, oh how beautiful she is....smiles and hugs

and you...my friend and poet, never cease to awaken my senses...touching a strong hold of a great wilderness of kindness and kindred souls, untouched and yet to find....

Marvelous Mocha Cappachino this morning sir

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2 posted 2005-01-11 08:16 AM


morning sir, and a pleasurable one it is after reading this fine piece


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3 posted 2005-01-11 08:20 AM


For Eden never spoke of death
And stays the essence of Gods breath

~*~

For some reason, Sy,
this jerked a tear...or two...




Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2005-01-11 08:40 AM


LeeJ
It is a pleasure to read your replies.

MGROVES
Your pleasure  is my pleasure.

Sunshine,

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5 posted 2005-01-11 09:28 AM


"An Eden built as God had done
And rebuilt in the eye of one
It is the force of Adam’s coup
That lives of course each morning’s dew

For Eden never spoke of death
And stays the essence of Gods breath"

Morning Sy..my this is SO beautiful..
yet touches on the melancholy side.
Much enjoyed as always ...

~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~


In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
an invincible summer.

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2005-01-11 09:38 AM


Nancy,
Love your hugs and tea.

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7 posted 2005-01-11 09:53 AM


*sigh* ... into my library this beauty goes.
A delight to read ~ thankyou Seymour.
hugs, Chris

~The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze~
Gustavo Adolfo Becquer

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2005-01-11 09:58 AM


Chris,
Thank you dear.

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9 posted 2005-01-11 11:44 AM


Beautifully written Sy.  

believe in what your heart feels...

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10 posted 2005-01-11 11:54 AM


An Eden built as God had done
And rebuilt in the eye of one
It is the force of Adam’s coup
That lives of course each morning’s dew

For Eden never spoke of death
And stays the essence of Gods breath


I love all of your poem, and the ending is perfect.
Hugs,  
Ethel

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11 posted 2005-01-11 03:47 PM


Well...the first stanza said to me that was one very "into herself woman" that I really didn't want to know, but you saved her as you went along and I actually liked her at the end.   Sitting on the throne of goal, been there, done that Sy, lonely place.  Great write this Tuesday's exercise m'friend.
Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2005-01-11 05:15 PM


scorpio
Thank you friend.

Ethel
Glad you enjoyed.

Sharon,
Yes it is an exercise. It helps to make you wise.

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13 posted 2005-01-11 08:02 PM


It is all ways fun to read your poems.

Juju

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14 posted 2005-01-11 08:06 PM


WOW, Sy!  Your words captured me from the very beginning!!   It's completely and absolutely beautiful!  

"For Eden never spoke of death
And stays the essence of Gods breath"  --  BREATHTAKING!   Thank you for sharing this one....and I will be keeping it in my library!!

...Becka

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15 posted 2005-01-12 05:32 AM


quite a touching piece Sy
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