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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Lights Out Something intimidating about a public toilet, especially with the lights off. The dark stops me like a net and I’m groping for a switch when they come up. Of course. Thrifty here. Motion sensor turns ‘em on, timer flips ‘em off. I’d like to reverse ‘em: move and it’s lights-out, wait for enlightenment. Auto-flush too, I can see it from here. Fun if I changed that too, but sloppy. The room knows when I come, knows when I go; Now there’s a thought. Do they check it twice at Christmas? The flush will have a timer too. If I don’t move or take too long to move, things happen anyway. But if I waited part of it would get out of sync, shut down and leave me in the dark. Think how surprised the next guy would be when the lights came on and I’m standing here. Or I could be normal, pee by the program and leave. They missed something. The musak stays on. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (01-10-2005 12:36 AM).] |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
When I first read your title, I was reminded by a game I use to play as a child, it was fun being in the dark with innocence then... As an adult in a public bathroom, darkness would be a scary thing...especially wihout a way to turn the lights back on... Your poem speaks to me about life and how there has to be an equal balance in all things...all things must work together and in sync... Like your new photo! ~ARH Come,love all of me, mind, body, spirit..feel my passion, taste of me, be filled completely! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Introspective feeling to this...but I can't quite put my finger on it, like it though. It is so much easier to control the environment, then have it control you...maybe that's it...yeah, I think that's it.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
made me think here... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
hehehhe, yup yup yup, public restrooms are a very scarey place....in the dark....but perhaps it's only a frame of mind? Morning Ed....as always, it's always a wise lesson learned reading you. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
but...some of the funniest things are written in bathrooms....yanno?...I saw something written on a prophylactic machine that read: "This is the worst chewing gum I've ever tasted"..another..."For refund, insert baby here".......I saw one on a mirror at the science bldg restroom at the University of Alabama...somebody had written "THINK" on the mirror....somebody else drew an arrow to the sink and then wrote "THOAP" with an arrow to the soap dispenser.....sounds like a Toerag bathroom...ya think? This was a well thought out piece of work Rat....I enjoyed it |
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Soulfisher Member
since 2005-01-07
Posts 226where ever the fly fishing is good |
rat leader this was definitly a different topic and a very funny one at that. just remember to leave the sign above the urnals that read MARINES DONT EAT THE WHITE CANDY |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
move and it’s lights-out, wait for enlightenment. Auto-flush too, I can see it from here. Fun if I changed that too, but sloppy. Your ability to find poetry of substance in the most trite situations is a constant source of amazement... and delight. *S* From introspective ponderings to snickers and back again... absolutely excellent! *S* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Public restrooms are scary even with the lights on. I enjoy where your mind takes me Ed. Thank you. Maree  into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
*giggling* It's amazing how such deep thoughts can be inspired by a toilet...Wonderful writing... |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
to know you could change it if you wanted to -- what power LOL enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
The musak stay on...LOL....figures eh? Love this..thanks for the chuckles and making me think. Hugs~ In the midst of winter, |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Just goes to show you, no matter how perfect the system, there's always room for improvement.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
lol at you and of course at Toe |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
ohhh...lights out in a public bathroom sends me into heart failure.... I am scared of toilets... must have been bad pottie training.. Very funny stuff... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Had me rolling on the floor with laughter with this one! Heehee… Haahaa… Too funny. JL |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
*laugh* Loved This!  ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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