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feeling pink |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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I stood and waited (for you) summer was ready to lie down, her corn wiggling free off the sky ladder, and i stood and waited anticipating in lips blushing candy pink dressed in a schoolgirl's moonshaped smile as maryjanes grew tall into stilettos, and i walked the world between l8 and 49 an aging goddess in a shamless dance of desire longing with ache for a boy born on the nations's bicentennial i stood blushed pink in peony printed dress with a radioactive heart that poured neon bright in white laceups 3 inches too high like a hooker i stood on a corner watching corn climb on its last rites, only to fall like an overtired overused rhyme thinking pink watching corn (and you never showed up) a tired goddess climbing to fall fooled by the wink of heaven into the blink of l8 becoming 49 in a wrinkeled mirror with dropping parts, corn husks dishevelling a thud upon the ground; i took a tumble, but loved so the pink of the drama, never feeling the heart, hurt so sublime. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (01-06-2005 10:12 PM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ah heck inky..some of the best wine is 49'...enjoyed the pink of you' and loved the heels kewl stuff |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This is one of your best inked one.. and you look great in pink and stiletto heels  49 and going strong! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent use of color in poetry...love it When a women speaks "pink" it raises something primal in a man...especially if it is a sad "pink", it makes a gentle man want to hug her... Doug Tanoury says it better than I in his poem "Pink Font" "...Talk to me only with a tint of pink words Whispered on the ether of each exhale And floating weightless On the warm vapor of each breath For I am helpless and entranced Possessed and driven by each letter And word and phrase and line" Perhaps it is also a calling on of the primal man within, that wants to save the "pink" from something? I felt that way when I read this... The poems short lines add to the intensity of the subject matter...good job, inky ____________ice/ford ><> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
inkedgoddess Well done, sombre thoughts good write. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I agree with Ice this is a very involving write. You are good, very good! And ...49 is seven times seven, which means absolute LUCK...... and in your case so much true Beauty! Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i dig the corn corn is ancient life, nice symbolism, wisdom with a honest profoundness, (sp?)(not the greatest speller) it seems to me like you are wise womyn with a great sense of humor. kindly, amelia |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
marvelous words and color my poetess friend...enjoyed the soft lovely feel of this |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
and pink candy kisses to you all |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I kid you not, I kept copying and pasting parts of your poems that I absolutely adored ~ and realized that I was copying the whole poem! This is another  of your poetry for my treasure trove. I love the creativity and the realness of your writes. You have an amazing amount of talent. You simply have to get books of your poetry published! EA |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Pretty in pink - no matter the time line - enjoyed this and the bite of realism that lay just beneath the pastels - Am a woman of black myself - perhaps I shall have to write black - Well done talented poetess- SusanEvery action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Enjoyed this awesome write. Thanks! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
never showed up  you know I got yer back girl  just call mestrange how a person can feel like a color...blue, pink, green, gray, white...black you just might have inspired me, but I'll have to come back to that later |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks again for the reads and the more important feedback you all bounce back at me with your own insights, and YES let's do MORE COLORS. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I feel pink just reading this! ^_^ ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Marvelous! you look great in Pink Inky, but then, you'd look great in any colour.  Enjoyed immensely it's a keeper Maree into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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