Open Poetry #34 |
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Wistful Moods |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wistful Moods Wistful moods are discerning on wintry days, for me. Briskly collecting deep quiet thoughts of you. Collecting thoughts of where you might be today, or, thoughts that you too might remember me… I truly miss those wintry days with you. Yet now, they are cold shadows of ghost, whispering ghost. Leaving their frosty breath on my windowpane. And coercing the drifting snow against my doorpost Ghost, conjuring-up memories, memories long past, and gone… Just now, I pictured us skating on that frozen pond. That abandoned pond, just outside town. Remember? We first ice-skated there, you and I. I spent several days on my own, learning to ice-skate there, cold days, all alone. I learned that way, so you wouldn’t see me fail - in whatever I would do. And I knew how you would respond when I truly surprised you: A sweet hug, a kiss on my cheek, that cute laugh of yours, and “JL”, as only you could say… I did look forward that, in my own mixed-up way; I do miss that too… Oh, I knew how to contrive ways to pull your attention to me, my mind so filled with obnoxious, immature jealousies. I was so in love with you, I just didn’t know how to be. My heart echoing: look at me – look at me. Such heartfelt wanting to be yours, with no apologies. Wanting to put you in my back pocket, carry you around, keeping all of you, just for me… But you couldn’t have known my true intentions. The way I was then, so obscure, with my emotions… I thought you might perceive me as pathetic, or weak spirited. So my soft words were tied into knots, and cultivated with weeds. Yet, inscribed on furrowed parchment within my heart, hidden there, silently received… I could spend my entire day with these wistful moods examining them with care… Wistful moods for wintry days, warming thoughts, comforting moods, abating this wintry air. Sitting here staring out my window watching these apparitions of days past, playing in the snow. And praying that someday, to you they may take wing. Delivering my dreams, wrapped in my heart’s parchment, so that you too might know… |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
JL, This was perfection. I related so completely and totally..I take my memories out from that time 2yrs ago and live in their warmth from time to time... ![]() "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Beautiful reminiscing and so touching Hope |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And praying that someday, to you they may take wing. Delivering my dreams, wrapped in my heart’s parchment, so that you too might know… ~*~ I believe you've succeeded... |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
What a wonderful write. I so enjoyed wandering through your memories and introspection. I think many can relate to this. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Bravo - I love the longing, the love woven in this - it touched my spirit - Susan Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Oh, I knew how to contrive ways to pull your attention to me, my mind so filled with obnoxious, immature jealousies. I was so in love with you, I just didn’t know how to be. My heart echoing: look at me – look at me. Such heartfelt wanting to be yours, with no apologies. Wanting to put you in my back pocket, carry you around, keeping all of you, just for me… But you couldn’t have known my true intentions. The way I was then, so obscure, with my emotions…" you tug at a handful of heartstrings with this...very very touching... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
JL You touch with this because so many can relate to the feeling and the way you have described it...I know, I did! ![]() |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I was so in love with you, I just didn’t know how to be. My heart echoing: look at me – look at me. Such heartfelt wanting to be yours, with no apologies. Wanting to put you in my back pocket, carry you around, keeping all of you, just for me… Oh, yes... just this. *S* Absolutely beautiful write, my friend... this is just what I needed to start my holiday... wistful beats despairing. *S* |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Beautiful write! ![]() ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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nn Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 75 |
This is one of the very few long poems I enjoy reading from beginning to end. Very well done. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I loved the softness of this write JL... the honesty and intensity. A favorite of yours I think. Hope you have wonderful holidays. TD |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hey JL ![]() Just popped in during my Christmas Vacation, yours is the first I've read so far...and all I can say, is this, JL, in the 3 years we've known each other, well, simply this...darlin, this is one of the best and most favorite of yours I've ever read. Its so honest, so just plain human emotion and humbleness....sweetie, I so love it when a man can do this...open his heart... God Bless you and Happy New Year.... Hugs Me |
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