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Caustically Yours
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Caustically Yours |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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Darling, come let me whisper in your ear Does it stun you to see this side of me? The caustic darkening is for you Today you sample my retribution Does it leave a bitter taste upon your tongue? Cry real tears for me this time But oh, sweets, you are not capable Trying so hard to keep the act The town crier singing of how he is the victim You use that acid mouth to tell me how you will do right by me The words sizzle with poison and burn my thoughts Close your infernal lips Look into the mirror I hold before you Let the venom of you reflect back And burn you blind So you may never be so vain again That you talk yourself into believing You are a real man A true man A man worthy of my time "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
um....exactly. Email on the way.  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow! Blistering. Enjoyed. JL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
whoooo hooo......... Susan just poetically said... READ MY LIPS and then kiss off.... lmao....... blistering indeed....... |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
WOW, Susan, what part doesn't he understand? LOL Hugs...and good luck, Ethel |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Brilliant Dave |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Look into the mirror I hold before you Let the venom of you reflect back And burn you blind So you may never be so vain again That you talk yourself into believing You are a real man A true man A man worthy of my time" ...uh...ummm...OK....so, let met be sure I understand; we don't like this person? *grin* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'd always said I'd buy tickets to see the match between you and whomever might be silly enough to underestimate you.  And lookie here, I got to see it for free! Izzit just me, or has there been a can of whup ass opened up I didn't know about? and it's okay. *laughing* I don't need to know. It's like the mafia. The less we know, the safer we are...  But I wouldn't mind watching you mud wrestle either. *grin* HUGE HUGS (we're friends, right?) *chuckle* |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
hopefully he's not going to pop in again on you anymore........ love and peace and good wishes for the new year |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Great write indeed! He will lick his wounds for a while .... Love, Margherita |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Popcorn everyone??? How 'bout a Coke, maybe some Goobers, a few Juju Fruits??? And now for our feature presentation...  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ah Susan, you've got the crowd going wild - some of the replies are a kick- The poem itself is indeed a well aimed dart, and should it hit its mark - the target will indeed suffer a painful wound for the point is sharp- well written - very emotive I hope that peace will be yours and that this New Year will be full of sweet pleasures- SusanEvery action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I think I'd better write something nice about this one.....(wouldn't want Susan C. mad at me!! lol) Really, a lot of emotion boils in this one and I sure wouldn't want to be the person this is aimed at! I'm sure, if he has any sensitivity about him at all, he has felt your message. Susan, I hope you have a good 2005 with many happy surprises..........jo |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Er, I really do hope I never find myself on your bad side... I've a feeling this person regrets whatever they did now. And they'll continue regretting it for a long time. Point well made! Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
lol... okay, so I might have some anger issues... but in my own defense, I really have to be pushed...yanno? and besides if I were really going to do something, I wouldn't write about it...I don't want to meet all of you for the first time from the defendant's chair...  Thank you for all the great replies!  for everyone.."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Anger issues??? I didn't see any issues here. lol I have to say, I don't think there is any questions as to where this person is on your list of beloved. Happy New Year to you and may you find a new year filled with the opposite of this one. |
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stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden |
Keep pushing my darling, my tongue can be as every bitter as yours! I have left you alone, I suggest you do the same. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow~ good for you~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was shall we say, the other side of love...which says, don't let the door hit you in the butt? |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Cry real tears for me this time But oh, sweets, you are not capable Trying so hard to keep the act The town crier singing of how he is the victim Still shaking my head amazed at the similarites in our lives....lmao. I really love the attitude in this one Susan. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A sketch of a permanent etch, a fetching kvetch. Poets against the war is redundant |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
A very good title. I do think that you express your rejection of causticity very very well here. -Bob |
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