Question # 713 - The Rights Of God

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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2005-02-05 12:09 PM

Thoughts of loss
and gone again,
preying on your mind,
anger,
rage,
frustration,
the rind of bitter fruit
sliced through
and dripping
caustic tears upon your soul,

“Why?”
“Who gets to choose who is taken
and who is left behind?”
As if logic runs a Universe
where all of distant life is lost
as galaxies collide;
cliches and homilies
are all that stand
against the tide of this question,
oh so very old.

If I told you what you ask right now,
your heart could turn to stone;
if I could hold you
while you cried,
or screamed,
or beat your fists around my head,
the rage would leave
but not the grief,
the dead will still be dead.

Because your heart is kind and fair,
you ask for life
to be a place without this mystery,
a place
of love and opportunity,
a place
with an Identity to blame for this despair;
all I can say this painful day
is
you are asking for a place
the living cannot share.

©2005 by icebox

Martie

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1 posted 2005-02-05 12:22 PM

icebox

"a place
with an Identity to blame for this despair"

Yes, it would be nice to have "someone" to blame, and I have raged about so many things and wondered if anyone heard or cared. Yet, I cannot not believe even though I doubt.

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2005-02-05 12:26 PM

"if I could hold you
while you cried,
or screamed,
or beat your fists around my head,
the rage would leave
but not the grief,
the dead will still be dead."

and it's the end of Santa Claus and peter pan and all good things be real....and let's clap real hard and our palms will merely be red.

And yeah, that has a tendency to piss us off.

And that doesn't make it any less true.

Hug us while we're here.

DavePage
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3 posted 2005-02-05 01:30 PM

I like it.

Dave

Lighthousebob
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4 posted 2005-02-05 01:45 PM

You express emotion very very well. I agree that there are some places that the living are not yet allowed and probably for some very good reason. (smiles) Enjoyed reading. -Bob

River
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my own little world

5 posted 2005-02-05 02:20 PM

wow...in my opinion this definately has wisdom weaved throughout and within along with good presentation. I love it. *add

- River

How can I stand here and not be moved by you? - Lifehouse

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

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6 posted 2005-02-05 03:43 PM

"you are asking for a place
the living cannot share."

Now, what can I say to that? Maybe we aren't the "living" - maybe we're just reflections of the "living" and maybe our limited ability just doesn't allow us to see the dead who are really the living. Something like that. Time will tell no doubt. Oh, we're really just here to have fun and the greatest mystery is why we don't ... and I was only going to say "Good write".

Margherita
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7 posted 2005-02-05 04:07 PM

Yes, dear icebox, these questions we ask ... since we began to think.
"Dead" is a word dreaded by the living, but I believe for the "dead" it means new life. But this is faith and hope. And it does not eliminate the pain.
Touching.
Love, Margherita

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2005-02-05 05:18 PM

icebox
Excellent writing, a maze is a maze and a phase is a phase.

the_loner_23
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9 posted 2005-02-05 06:14 PM

This is excellent.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Midnitesun

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Gaia

10 posted 2005-02-05 09:48 PM

It's never been the rights I've ultimately questioned
rather, it's the rites...
enjoyed this write

words are so much fun

James_A_Fraser
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Out Making Anticlines

11 posted 2005-02-06 10:01 AM

Couldn't have said it better myself -- so I didn't. This poem seems familiar to me in a lot of ways, but I was a bit thrown by the use of a number in the title. That rings no bells for me, other than being the area code for Houston....

~~J

vandana

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12 posted 2005-02-06 10:43 AM

enjoyed

passing shadows
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displaced

13 posted 2005-02-06 10:53 AM

I relate

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