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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2004-12-29 12:37 PM


Seconds, minutes, hours,
and time merges them together
until day gives way to night
and I walk the shadowed halls
of each weakness I possess.

Night comforts and caresses
like the trail of lover’s hands
over and around
my outline of need  
and I stir within a dream
frightened there to see
love walks a lonely path
beyond my mental feel.

Wakeful now, aware,
but dreaming still I see
the mist of distance closing in
and I suffocate.  

“Breathe”, she says,
as I listen to the gurgle
of one by love possessed
rise up and out in agony
into the still and silent night.

Dramatic for effect
and I read the words, reflect;
who writes the pain and heartache
of unrequited love?  

© Copyright 2004 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Elan
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State of Wide Eye
1 posted 2004-12-29 01:19 PM



Who inspired this?
It's lovely!

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2004-12-29 01:21 PM


Wow!!  I like this very much..
Well done Helen!!
Hugs~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Honeybunch
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3 posted 2004-12-29 02:12 PM


Elan  - I guess it's inspired by unrequited love on the one hand and plain and simple love on the other.  Thanks for the read.


Honeybunch
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4 posted 2004-12-29 02:14 PM


Thanks Enchantress but I speak on behalf of the one who wrote it.  She has no name but she does exist.  
*Alli4000*
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5 posted 2004-12-29 06:55 PM


Very nice!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-12-29 11:04 PM


I love this Helen!
Honeybunch
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7 posted 2004-12-30 12:08 PM


Thank you Alli and Dixie for your kind comments.  Happy New Year!
JL
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8 posted 2004-12-30 01:37 PM


Very nice work.  Enjoyed!

JL


Ratleader
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9 posted 2005-01-19 10:19 PM


We all try.

None of us succeeds.

After all, it really can't be said, not fully...though poets like you come so close at times....

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