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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2004-12-29 12:37 PM

Seconds, minutes, hours,
and time merges them together
until day gives way to night
and I walk the shadowed halls
of each weakness I possess.

Night comforts and caresses
like the trail of lover’s hands
over and around
my outline of need
and I stir within a dream
frightened there to see
love walks a lonely path
beyond my mental feel.

Wakeful now, aware,
but dreaming still I see
the mist of distance closing in
and I suffocate.

“Breathe”, she says,
as I listen to the gurgle
of one by love possessed
rise up and out in agony
into the still and silent night.

Dramatic for effect
and I read the words, reflect;
who writes the pain and heartache
of unrequited love?

Elan
Member

since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

1 posted 2004-12-29 01:19 PM

Who inspired this?
It's lovely!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2004-12-29 01:21 PM

Wow!! I like this very much..
Well done Helen!!
Hugs~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

3 posted 2004-12-29 02:12 PM

Elan - I guess it's inspired by unrequited love on the one hand and plain and simple love on the other. Thanks for the read.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2004-12-29 02:14 PM

Thanks Enchantress but I speak on behalf of the one who wrote it. She has no name but she does exist.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2004-12-29 06:55 PM

Very nice!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-12-29 11:04 PM

I love this Helen!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2004-12-30 12:08 PM

Thank you Alli and Dixie for your kind comments. Happy New Year!

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2004-12-30 01:37 PM

Very nice work. Enjoyed!

JL

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

9 posted 2005-01-19 10:19 PM

We all try.

None of us succeeds.

After all, it really can't be said, not fully...though poets like you come so close at times....

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