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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Another part of a theme called lightly Backstreet somewhere Only chewing time Brick walls supporting Only chewing rhyme Met a girl lunchtime She only worked late Took me for a long time Dancing on a grate Took men for food Fed me soup Took me for something Made me whoop Tribal name was Wong Family name was Foo Still remember her face Never would have come back To this place But it is all different now We dont abuse people We dont avoid them We dont fear them I'd trust that woman More Because she was a woman Who only robbed me Lightly |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Steal my wow, would you? I think you would do so, lightly... this is a marvelous trip down rhyme and word play and if this is just "imagination"... then I applaud you... and if this is reality sketched? I  bow. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Took me on a mental journey back to the shores of the Tonkin. Very nice write. JL |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This was great - made me smile - especially the ending -  Susan |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Sunshine and if this is just "imagination"... then I applaud you... and if this is reality sketched? I bow. Sunshine - beside the drafts and words of poetry on my site, I have put the drafts of 12 - which was originally "Standby to Jump Out, Standby and Jump", plus my ideas on "Hawk and the Lady" and I've put this in "Lightly" and load that up. All things have an idea of reality but the danger I feel si that if you try to control ideas rather than trust the ideas to develop themselves that all you can only write is what you see. There is a Lady with a tribal name of Wong and a Family name of Kee. I was in the Far East in 1967-69 but in Singapore. On another point: I used to play football outside Wormwood Scrubs Prison as a kid. My blood group is "B". I have at times said goodbye to girls at Stations and also Hello in the rush hour at Bank station to a girl like some stone in a tide pouring in. At some point a woman called Karilea may work in a French owned Bistro in Hamburg at the edge of the Universitat. We all take our images but the images take us further than we could ever hope to go. Dave JL Took me on a mental journey back to the shores of the Tonkin. It does get interesting JL. Dave Susan This was great - made me smile - especially the ending - Thanks Susan - humour hits from all angles - in a street in Singapore, if it was a lovely lady, it was a man - Bugee Street I think it was called (now destroyed, I'm told). Curfew and safe areas - at least I was robbed in a safe area in Singapore and the next time was in Maastricht where I was just attacked and fought back. Maybe people who liked to write do go out to find ideas, see sites, listen to people and words. Maybe I will write, but the hard work I have had the chance to do and I wrote poetry instead. Dave |
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