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no place to take this tonight
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no place to take this tonight |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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Wickedly captivating, your smile, dances in and out of focus blinking redundantly within the waves, resonating rainbeats perptually sink now within synchonic outlines, a final resting place, temporary salvation, the heart is striken; cradled, then punished the appartion begins final fadeout as you stretch along the drowning miles, was it purely imagination that you ever touched down at all? pounding the puddles bullets fall upon an already grieving heart, the sky is waterlogged,drowning in its own deluge, a slapping sting, your silence stains these tearfilled walls, shaking with storms withering in foam ever moving, but trapped, you live within, the waves crown the sea; midnight is draped in the beauty of madness, there is no place to take this pain tonight. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (10-20-2004 11:16 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh God, you know Michele, the last stanza is beyond amazing, wish I had written it, wish I could take it from you --> that pain and yes, it was real.  knowing that stab . . . |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
A wonderfully empty write... sometimes it seems this way... I look forward to the time when you are full again, and write of that. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Such a sad ache to this Michele... Heart hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You have taken the pain on to these pages of blue and you did it in powerful poetic expressions. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
oh this is outstanding. I felt it. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh  God |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
 toothanks guys |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Powerful, poignant, fierce, yes, that's it the fierceness of the abyss, falling from that cliff, who will catch and hold you... take these words |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thank u dear paulie |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ma'am... hugs for the hurts.. the poem.. well done |
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PassionandFun Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 60 |
Nice job! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Michelle, I'm glad that this came back up. This is very well written. I could feel the pain in it. Hugs, Ethel |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
 thanks for reading again |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
powerful write....  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"was it purely imagination that you ever touched down at all?" silently touching the screen  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, Michele, I can put myself in this scene with complete understanding. You said something I have felt a time or two myself so very perfectly. This is like hearing music that makes you cry because it touches a part of you in its sad beauty.  .....jo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
there is always a place with warm windows and a lover's eyes reflecting back and hell is warmer now |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good write |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for bringing this back again......i felt it deeply when i wrote it and still do |
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