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rose-colored masquerade |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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That place was made of splintered planks I would drink and gaze at them counting ages in the knots every ring I downed a shot tossing gratitude to Rose. She begged to be an egyptian in the dark of daytime bar eyeliner was laid on thick and she wore this push-up bra. I know, because I felt her once, or twice, I played the dark of her. She'd toss my dollars back at me begging me to play the box then she'd lock the doors and smile as we danced the circles there mirrored just beneath her eyes-- Rose looked good in rosy light. We shuffled rainy days away scratching at each others backs chalking up the other's cue she dropped my balls in order - racked in the glow of five beer lights and one blinking neon sign I find myself remembering the petals of her trembling just before the fall. I wish I hadn't torn the lace of her sacred underneath. I wish I hadn't wished at all "counting flowers on the wall" instead of honesty of eye -- Rose looked good in rosy light. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
wow Karen, I think you are writing from a male point of view? it reads like a story, one in which I could read over and over again....well done indeed! ~~*~~ |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
This is awesome. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
OH MY! a standing ovation my dear. Both the Capt and Duncan will GLOW when they read this. THIS is the ultimate. WOW! can I say that again? WOW WOW WOW! came back again just to drool a bit wish I'd written this |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Rose looked good in rosy light. Oh I'm sure she did  A challenge well met indeed m'lady.  Mxx and I am haunted |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh wonderful *APPLAUSE* loving this!! looks like wranx with a smidge of cpat |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is SO Ed . . . Karen? This is lovely . . . what a most beautiful tribute. I agree with Dawn here, too though. I see them both. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Okay, so I stink at this game, no big surprise. I still loved it. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, A vail of introspection, each day you are a rose.  |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
wow...astounding imagery...and rhythm... in awe, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic Karen.. Gee, I see the Captain...Wranx and Duncan. I'll be back later for another look-see. Love ya lady~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
whewww, there are no words to describe this materpiece...gripping right to the end... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks, m'witch. I appreciate it! I don't see any "me" here, but DO see more than a little Duncpat Hair (I sometimes think them boys is sharin' a brain, anyway) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ok...I see a bit of both Ron and Dark with maybe a lil Wranx throwed in too? I know, thats three.... so if I havta pick....I'm going to say Dark... at any rate, very well done K! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 I'm afraid my little witch feet couldn't quite fit the shoes of the magnificent yeti. (er...if yetis wore shoes) It was fun to try though. Thanks all for reading, and especially Ed for his gentle grace and humor. I love you all bunches. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well, m'witch You'd agree that it's not a thing I'm likely to see...And besides, I've NEVER written this well! Thank you Karen, I am truly honored! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Wonderful piece here - ah, and I don't have to guess - tee hee Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, I thought I saw a Wranx in there, but more Duncan than anyone. SHRUGGING But it is a totally cool righteous write m'friend and the yeti IS a tough act to follow or copy. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I see a little bit of Dark in this. But, could be wrong. Well done Ser. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent write, serenity... you kissed so many with this one! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
you wrote him beautifully, Karen |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Dang, I missed this for crying out loud! I would have guessed wrong anyway, I would have been sure it was Ron T, after having a beer with the Yeti or Alicat. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjooyed...James |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
You never cease to amaze me, K... This is awesome...  "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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