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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-12-20 10:45 AM

Sitting here, listening to the wind
hearing the voice inside wanting,
forgetting to say those words
but always thinking them.

Wishing to take back my years
to rediscover the colors of the rainbow
that used to wrap me fluorescent,
allowing me to "shine"
and be the better me.

Like those logs going up in flame,
I see my past burning, secrets
that even I don't understand,
feelings that need those soft whispers
touching me again ( smiling as I
call myself a "touch-tone" generation.)

Forgive me for the lack of words.
It is hard to push the failures down,
feeling second hand and trapped
in this body.

Thoughts haunt me, tempt me
as I reach into my pocket
and there I can warm the cold of hard,
a worry stone, where fingers rest,
where words are only thoughts
and in my keep.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2004-12-20 10:53 AM

ooh, I love the feel of this, the language woven is superbly...you do need a "d" on "use" for "used to..."

your last line is so true, yet it makes me think of how often we need to NOT keep some thoughts for they pull us down rather than lift us up, to release them can release us

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2004-12-20 10:57 AM

Thank you again..for the correction and the kind response.

M

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2004-12-20 12:37 PM

"Forgive me for the lack of words.
It is hard to push the failures down,
feeling second hand and trapped
in this body"

failure is such an ugly word. learnures is better. We learn where we are not successful..and then we do better. But we have to get up and out in order to do better.

lovely write.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2004-12-20 12:59 PM

Maureen, sometimes our memories are good and
cheer us up.....
other times, they aren't so good and pull us down.
I understand this so well, sweet lady.
My thoughs and prayers are still with you,

Alicia
Member

since 2002-03-22

Posts 279

5 posted 2004-12-20 12:59 PM

~feeling this, what you write.
and how interesting,...that we both chose this morning to end our pieces with the stones. wow.
wonderfully written.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

6 posted 2004-12-20 03:08 PM

Maureen, some memories are for keeping, unfortunately not all, for they are the ones that'll bring us down.

Maree

p.s keeping this one.

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

A Tone of Voice
Member

since 2001-07-18

Posts 287

7 posted 2004-12-20 04:02 PM

A touch tone generation---interesting concept! Amazing how those moments escape us to become ~memories~....emotion packed!

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

8 posted 2004-12-20 04:58 PM

As well written as ever

Dave

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