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DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

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0 posted 2004-12-18 06:04 PM

We scattered over sand to avoid the gentle drizzle of rain scattering us in our legs as we ran laughing for the pleasure

A three foot wall seemed nothing as you waited hair drenched on your back to be seen and approached as winds swept in, in blinding hail

On a grey rain drenched wall
Of rain washed
Torrents

Cotton held gentle drops of feet in a blinding storm as the sea took us swaying towards us floating as the wall held moving us from the wild to another wild that was never as honest as the wild we enjoyed

We made the old factory
Where women stacked kippers for smoking
In a life that spoke hard social
Now they stack shelves
That speak solitary hard social

And no sea, no trysts, no thoughts, no escape just a longer life

And what is life
Without life
And maybe a cold wet wall
In a cotton wet dress
In a feeling

Of life

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

1 posted 2004-12-18 07:18 PM

A continuous surprise Dave.
Every poem leads to another creative curve that hangs the reader to the very edge.

Great write!

Eric

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

2 posted 2004-12-18 09:03 PM

Maybe it's the 'B' blood, Eric

And I think about the plasma.

I just want to write about life and I write for others and I try to write honest.

Thanks mate

Dave

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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3 posted 2004-12-18 09:37 PM

enjoyed much

HopeS
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since 2000-12-22

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Perth Western Australia

4 posted 2004-12-19 07:04 AM

" the wild we enjoyed " yes that takes me back

Hope

*Alli4000*

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The World of Poetry

5 posted 2004-12-19 03:10 PM

Very nice write Dave!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

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california

6 posted 2004-12-20 04:54 AM

i have missed your interesting and thought provoking writes. wishing you peace and happiness this xmas and this new year coming

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

7 posted 2004-12-20 02:27 PM

passing shadows

Thanks Passing - I enjoyed writing it.

HopeS

Was that to last week Hope.

*Alli4000*

Thanks Alli.

MGROVES

Thanks. I have a few things taking up my interest at the moment.

Most I could probably do without but I do consider Piptalk to be a major chunk of my writing thinking.

Thanks everyone

Dave

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