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Open Poetry #34

Some Time

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

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0 posted 2004-12-17 06:39 PM

Sometime

In a smile
Desire twitches feeds
Of sufficiency
On
Images
Masked with sounds
In a light
Darkened with illuminated scenes
Of captured ideas
Within your thoughts
Within your mask
Within your room

Sometime

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

1 posted 2004-12-17 06:57 PM

I like it

Sunshine

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2 posted 2004-12-18 08:57 AM

This trickles faster
than a rain raged
waterfall..

so I read it three times!

MGROVES

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3 posted 2004-12-20 05:31 AM

another i hope you don't mind if i dont respond to with words. my thoughts are racing yet words do not come

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

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4 posted 2004-12-20 02:41 PM

passing shadows

Thanks Passing but it is still like Parting.

The idea is there as are the words but I haven't got my brain around it.

Parting I have put in my publishable section but this goes into working drafts.

Sunshine

I dont know if I would say that. It may even become part of parting and part the water poem and part what I will call North East and go on Themes.

MGROVES

Whatever you want to write or not write is fine by me.

I am pleased that you read my words, imperfect as they are and they are imperfect.

Thanks all

Dave

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