Open Poetry #34 |
Blue |
ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
It's a dot in the darkness an ocean covered planet, son... people argued out of love loved to argue so much dams collapsed, oceans spilt over some cried the sky had fallen they were taken for loonies... To go back to populate that blue spot what was there to enter your thoughts? too much effort was spent on personal space too much time on distinctions between races. An insignificant dot in eternal space it's inhabitants couldn't ever save face they knew they could have lived better but went all out to pervert the weather... Look at us now in this canaled land so different from where we once stood? The urge to be diverse has followed us, perhaps differences destroyed the trust.. or through indifference it was undermined, that the blue dot could hold us no longer... now you've decided to head back as if you could mend old tracks! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Very interesting - makes one think and consider - well done - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Martin, an enjoyable adventure, and pondering that ending, the logistics of returning to the scene of the crime. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Gads, Martin, the layers of this to speak across millenia... Publish this one, Sir... publish this far and wide... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Martin, I hope we are still in time to begin appreciating the differencies. Very powerful write. Love, Margherita |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Karilea, Has a sci-fi slant to it which I kinda like..but there's so much truth in it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you do write in truth yes I always look forward to your next |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thanks so much for commenting Passing... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Earth to Mars. Blue dot to red dot ~ and back again... Intriguing read, Dear Philosophizing Poet! Love, Peace & Harmony ~ and to the survival of the kindest! EA |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Then...assuredly you would agree... this needs to be published! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Enjoyed this philosphy and must say I agree with Kari... publish. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Okay, okay..anybody know a good cheap press for an American chap book around? |
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