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Open Poetry #34

Storm - final rewrite

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

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0 posted 2004-12-16 01:32 PM

Storm

Clouds gray
Swarm a darkened night of dreams
Hammering wet pavements
With drizzling perfect expressions of red torrents of power
Striking impunity energy sound colour words misunderstandings
As gathering skies attack pleasure and innocence
To echo mountains
Driven wild
With swarming fiery pestilent answers to a Sun’s day
In a world
Of eyes strength impotence dreams
Echoing thoughts that in your eyes
Of nothing
Desiring nothing
You gave all to nothing
As heavy rain spins heroes to the courage
You chose to ignore
And ice crimson blue fire
Lances a boil
Of futility

MGROVES

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1 posted 2005-01-11 05:39 AM

wow cant believe noone replied nice

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

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2 posted 2005-01-11 07:52 AM

intense and from a swollen heart....hugs

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

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california

3 posted 2005-01-11 01:52 PM

thought provoking yet eases ones mind and i thank you for sharing

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

4 posted 2005-01-11 05:40 PM

Thanks.

I still have to acknowledge that the original came from the Duke of Cumberland in Parson's Green London as I watch a storm break over where Putney Bridge would be.

I did include a failing love affair that I couldn't save in this, and the original was written 28 years ago.

I still fail but as someone said "I am now older and wiser - I wouldn't tell you about it".

Thanks

Dave

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