»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #34
»
Beating God Into Him
| Open Poetry #34 |
|
Beating God Into Him |
|
|
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
*"The old woman across the way is whipping the boy again and shouting to the neighborhood her goodness and his wrongs." ............................................. The lash instills the righteousness That God Proclaims (she thinks) Digests the devils fat... That's been swallowed by the naïf. But welts of corporal punishment: Red brands, in letters raised, Make graven image of the cane Like said, made Moses crash, The sacred, Torah plates; The whip is a golden calf. A stinging thrash on human flesh Frowns a God of mercy's face... And no glue can make the tablets whole, For beatings grind them, fine as sand; Their message blurs, then disappears When skin impacts with plaits. .............................................. *"And the woman leans muttering against a tree, exhausted, purged-- avenged in part for lifelong hidings she has had to bear." (*exerts from- "The Whipping" by Robert Hayden..1971) |
||
| © Copyright 2004 ford hume - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I recognised that first excerpt the second I read it. A good poem. And you added to it justice poetically. Sad realities... make me cringe. Good write. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Make graven image of the cane" that says it all I like the layered word-play ice, very much. (And funny, I was just thinking of the word "imprinting", and graphically it depicts the biology of physical legacy of emotional scarring) A thoughtful, intriguing write. thank you |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you...and thanks is not enough... for the sins of a parent will always bear even more greatly on a child... oh, I remember... several things... and this brought even more into circumspect.... with highlights. thank you, Ford... thank you for all you have given all of us. |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ford This is something that more people should talk about....as a teacher for many years, I tried to tell parents that believed they had to, that no, they didn't have to. Thank you for writing this and posting it. |
||
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"And no glue can make the tablets whole, For beatings grind them, fine as sand;" *sigh* if only they understood, the heart and mind bruise more deeply than the body and are as hard to mend as Humpty I didn't want to read this after reading the title, but of course, I am not sorry that I did |
||
|
Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
It’s tougher on girls for a mother to be so even in words. /pip/Forum1/HTML/000972.html |
||
|
Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Mental cringing.. Only because of the vividness ane high quality of the poem. Great write.. ~Jen Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
||
Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Good to see this - more parents should read it, but they won't unfortunately. Happy Holidays Ford. |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So sad Ford....so damn sad. |
||
|
Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
OOOOHHH the memories!! You wrote it just as how I felt at that point when my sisters and I were much younger. |
||
|
froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Hi Ford, This is still an ouch poem as I said last night in chat. :-) Within this heart you'll find love |
||
|
stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden |
Dear sir, this write made me remember all to well, days long since past. I have found sucess for my children without the need for a cane. I wish I could write like you, maybe in a couple of hundred years. Outstanding!!! Thanks. |
||
|
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Friends... Your replies are greater than the poem... No matter what people tell me about the benifits of striking a child, I cannot condone it... To me it is child abuse. As well, I consider striking other adults with fists or bullets, abuse. With hands across my heart I whisper Namaste to all of you... ___________ice/ford ><> Come read to me some poem, |
||
|
MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
i know of these scars- powerful write m'friend- My spirit will rise |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
