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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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thin ice the season ~December~ the end in sight edged in white this warm body responds little to the winds of late less likely to be stirred and not expected to carry much on its back storms have raged here between placid reflections and sparkling sunsets though few have been paused to notice assuredly the spring paradox will return for another and will flow in its own new way refreshed but now the ice has begun to form as a wrinkled skim |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
interesting |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
assuredly the spring paradox will return for another and will flow in its own new way refreshed but now the ice has begun to form as a wrinkled skim ~*~ It's the "quiet time" Kraw... thank you for the reflection... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"but now the ice has begun to form as a wrinkled skim" I like this poem, and those last lines made me laugh with the clarity of their insight. Brilliant! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
E, this is totally in tune with the tangible touchable world. Enjoyed the ending stanza especially. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
" but now the ice has begun to form as a wrinkled skim" How much it does look like wrinkled skim!  Much enjoyed the view Kraw. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Let peace begin with me... ~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
interesting, enjoyed |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
How come your ice forms like that? My ice forms like sheets of glass that spread out from the centre and turns snow to slush. It's a unique term that wrinkled skim but I like it a lot. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent verse Kraw daddy... But I like winter, it gives me time to rest and go fishing on that "wrinkled skin" I hope the skin is thick enough soon to hold my weight.. ____________ice ><> Come read to me some poem, |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
nice |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
lovely reading |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It's been cold here too. I loved your poem about winter. Hugs, Ethel |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Nicely written! Love this. ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Like icebox, those last lines had a tremendous visual impact on me. Excellent describe, and the between the line thoughts also made me smile at your clever acuity. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Thank you all kindly for looking in. While I like December and winter well enough, I intended a metaphor on another kind of December. I think I massaged the shorter version a little too long and buried it in the added detail. And maybe that last line . . . Dang. Even when the muse is reluctant, one needs to know when to quit. K, you saw a little something between the lines?  e |
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